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    raphaellu

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    Ms. Arroyo Marathon

    Post  raphaellu on Tue Nov 10, 2009 12:06 am

    Arcadia: Home of the Runners
    Raphael Lu

    On Nov. 1, New York City hosted a world- wide marathon. Arcadia High School’s very own, Ms. Kellie Arroyo, was one of the participants. Having been training for five months, she finally won a spot in the race, for the participants were chosen through a lottery. Out of 38,000 runners Ms. Kellie Arroyo was the 26,795th to finish race with a time of 04:33:08.
    The course of the race looped around the islands of New York City. Starting on Staten Island, the runners crossed the Verrazano- Narrows Bridge onto Brooklyn, along tthe edge of Brooklyn into the Queens, across Queensboro Bridge onto Manhattan Island, up First Ave., and half way around Central Park to the finish.
    During the race Ms. Arroyo received encouragement from “a man named Eric with whom [she] had the same pace. When [they] were running though the Bronx, the crowd was very small and quite. He began cheering, yelling, and encouraging us all as he was running with [them]. It was cool to she how he encouragement caused [the] whole group to pick up the pace.”
    Coming close to the end, Ms. Arroyo was about to give up. She wanted “to cut her legs off” because it hurt so much. It “hurt [more for her] to walk then run” so she had to keep trucking on. At the end she swore “that [she] would never run again”, but after seeing her “time for the half mark was 1:58… [she] changed [her] mind and decided that [she’d] have to do it again to reach [her] goal [of]…four hours.”
    To anyone else who plans on running a marathon, she suggests “to listen to your body. Injuries are not worth it.” Mr. Arroyo plans to continue running marathons and hopes to be able to participate in the “Seattle marathon and Chicago marathon.”
    Congratulations Ms. Arroyo and good luck on future marathons.

    reginaliu

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    Re: Ms. Arroyo Marathon

    Post  reginaliu on Wed Nov 11, 2009 12:14 am

    On Nov. 1, New York City hosted a world- wide marathon. Arcadia High School’s [AHS's] very own, Ms. Kellie Arroyo, was one of the participants. Having been [replace with "after"] training for five months, she finally won a spot in the race, for the participants were chosen through a lottery. Out of 38,000 runners Ms. Kellie Arroyo was the 26,795th to finish race with a time of 04:33:08.
    The course of the race looped around the islands of New York City. Starting on Staten Island, the runners crossed the Verrazano- Narrows Bridge onto Brooklyn, along tthe [the] edge of Brooklyn into the Queens, across Queensboro Bridge onto Manhattan Island, up First Ave., and half way around Central Park to the finish.
    During the race Ms. Arroyo received encouragement from “a man named Eric with whom [she] had the same pace. When [they] were running though the Bronx, the crowd was very small and quite [quiet?]. He began cheering, yelling, and encouraging us all as he was running with [them] [us?]. It was cool to she [did you mean "see"?] how he [did you mean "his"?] encouragement caused [the] whole group to pick up the pace.”
    Coming close to the end [Near the finish line], Ms. Arroyo was about to give up. She wanted “to cut her legs off” because it hurt so much. It “hurt [more for her] to walk then run” so she had to keep trucking on. At the end she swore “that [she] would never run again”, but after seeing her “time for the half mark was 1:58… [she] changed [her] mind and decided that [she’d] have to do it again to reach [her] goal [of]…four hours.”
    To anyone else who plans on running a marathon, she suggests “to listen to your body. Injuries are not worth it.” Mr. Arroyo plans to continue running marathons and hopes to be able to participate in the “Seattle marathon and Chicago marathon.”
    Congratulations[,] Ms. Arroyo[,] and good luck on future marathons.

    raphaellu

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    Ms. Arroyo Marathon

    Post  raphaellu on Wed Nov 11, 2009 4:13 pm

    Arcadia: Home of the Runners
    Raphael Lu

    On Nov. 1, New York City hosted a world- wide marathon. AHS’s very own, Ms. Kellie Arroyo, was one of the participants. After training for five months, she finally won a spot in the race, for the participants were chosen through a lottery. Out of 38,000 runners Ms. Kellie Arroyo was the 26,795th to finish race with a time of 04:33:08.
    The course of the race looped around the islands of New York City. Starting on Staten Island, the runners crossed the Verrazano- Narrows Bridge onto Brooklyn, along the edge of Brooklyn into the Queens, across Queensboro Bridge onto Manhattan Island, up First Ave., and half way around Central Park to the finish.
    During the race Ms. Arroyo received encouragement from “a man named Eric with whom [she] had the same pace. When [they] were running though the Bronx, the crowd was very small and quiet. He began cheering, yelling, and encouraging us all as he was running with [them]. It was cool to see how his encouragement caused [the] whole group to pick up the pace.”
    Near the finish line, Ms. Arroyo was about to give up. She wanted “to cut her legs off” because it hurt so much. It “hurt [more for her] to walk then run” so she had to keep trucking on. At the end she swore “that [she] would never run again”, but after seeing her “time for the half mark was 1:58… [she] changed [her] mind and decided that [she’d] have to do it again to reach [her] goal [of]…four hours.”
    To anyone else who plans on running a marathon, she suggests “to listen to your body. Injuries are not worth it.” Mr. Arroyo plans to continue running marathons and hopes to be able to participate in the “Seattle marathon and Chicago marathon.”
    Congratulations, Ms. Arroyo, and good luck on future marathons.

    nancyxiao

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    Re: Ms. Arroyo Marathon

    Post  nancyxiao on Thu Nov 12, 2009 5:11 am

    Arcadia: Home of the Runners
    Raphael Lu

    On Nov. 1, New York City hosted a world- wide marathon. [On Nov. 1, New York City hosted the New York Marathon, a world-wide 42.2 km footrace.] AHS’s very own, Ms. Kellie Arroyo, [delete commas---not an appositive] was one of the participants. After training for five months, she finally won a spot in the race, for the participants were chosen through a lottery. [sentence doesn't make sense...how does training for five months help her win the lottery? i know that's not what you're trying to say] Out of 38,000 runners [insert comma] Ms. Kellie Arroyo was the 26,795th to finish race with a time of 04:33:08. [finished the race in 26,795th place with a time of 04:33:08.]
    The course of the race looped [loops] around the islands of New York City [New York---i'm not sure about this. is NYC big enough to have islands?]. Starting on Staten Island, the runners crossed [cross] the Verrazano- Narrows [Verrazano-Narrows] Bridge onto Brooklyn, [ran---your sentence structure is inconsistent. you're saying that the runners cross the bridge, then the runners along...then the runners across....there need to be verbs!] along the edge of Brooklyn into the Queens, [same thing, insert a verb] across Queensboro Bridge onto Manhattan Island, [verb] up First Ave., and [another verb] half way [halfway] around Central Park to the finish. [You can avoid inserting all those verbs by changing the beginning of your sentence to "Starting on Staten Island, the runners ran over the Verrazano-Narrows Bridge......and the rest of the sentence can be kept as is!]
    During the race [comma] Ms. Arroyo received encouragement from “a man named Eric with whom [she] had the same pace. When [they] were running though the Bronx, the crowd was very small and quiet. He began cheering, yelling, and encouraging us all [the other runners] as he was running [ran] with [them]. It was cool to see [She enjoyed seeing] how his encouragement caused [the] whole group to pick up the pace.”
    Near the finish line, Ms. Arroyo was about to give up. She wanted “to cut her legs off” because it hurt so much. It “hurt [more for her] to walk then run” so she had to keep trucking on. At the end she swore “that [she] would never run again”, but after seeing her “time for the half mark was 1:58… [she] changed [her] mind and decided that [she’d] have to do it again to reach [her] goal [of]…four hours.” [check to make sure there are opening and closing quotations for each quote....either make this one quote or not a quote at all. it's confusing to see so many quotes and brackets]
    To anyone else who plans on running a marathon, she suggests “to listen to your body. Injuries are not worth it.” Mr. [Ms.] Arroyo plans to continue running marathons and hopes to be able to participate in the “Seattle marathon and Chicago marathon.”
    Congratulations, Ms. Arroyo, [delete commas---not an appositive......you can also just delete it...it sounds repetitive continuing from the previous sentence] and good luck on future marathons. [!----i like exclamation marks, they make everything exciting...teehee Very Happy]

    raphaellu

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    Ms. Arroyo Marathon

    Post  raphaellu on Fri Nov 13, 2009 12:13 am

    Ms. Arroyo Marathon
    Raphael Lu

    On Nov. 1, New York City hosted the New York Marathon, a world-wide 42.2 km footrace. AHS’s very own Ms. Kellie Arroyo was one of the participants. After training for five months, it finally paid of when she won a spot in the marathon, for the participants were chosen through a lottery. Out of 38,000, runners Ms. Kellie Arroyo finished the race in 26,795th place with a time of 04:33:08.
    The course of the race loops around the islands of New York City. Starting on Staten Island, the runners ran over the Verrazano-Narrows Bridge onto Brooklyn, along the edge of Brooklyn into the Queens, across Queensboro Bridge onto Manhattan Island, up First Ave., and half way around Central Park to the finish.
    During the race, Ms. Arroyo received encouragement from “a man named Eric with whom [she] had the same pace. When [they] were running though the Bronx, the crowd was very small and quiet. He began cheering, yelling, and encouraging [the other runners] as he [ran] with [them]. [She enjoyed seeing] how his encouragement caused [the] whole group to pick up the pace.”
    Near the finish line, Ms. Arroyo was about to give up. She wanted “to cut her legs off” because it hurt so much. It “hurt [more for her] to walk then run” so she had to keep trucking on. At the end she swore “that [she] would never run again”, but after seeing her “time for the half mark was 1:58,… [she] changed [her] mind and decided that [she’d] have to do it again to reach [her] goal [of]…four hours.”
    To anyone else who plans on running a marathon, she suggests “to listen to your body. Injuries are not worth it.” Ms. Arroyo plans to continue running marathons and hopes to be able to participate in the “Seattle marathon and Chicago marathon.”
    Congratulations Ms. Arroyo and good luck on future marathons!

    Arcadia: Home of Runner
    Marathoners: Closer than you Think

    raphaellu

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    Ms. Arroyo Marathon

    Post  raphaellu on Sat Nov 14, 2009 1:37 pm

    Ms. Arroyo Marathon
    Raphael Lu

    Many people only know Ms. Kellie Arroyo as a Modern World History teacher at AHS. She has been at AHS for 6 years in Arcadia and has taught “psychology, gov./econ., and presently modern World History. [She] attended APU (Azusa Pacific University) to receive [her] teaching credential, bachelor’s degree, and master’s degree.” However, what some people may not know about her is that she is a marathoner.
    On Nov. 1, New York City hosted the New York Marathon, a world-wide 42.2 km footrace. AHS’s very own Ms. Kellie Arroyo was one of the participants. After training for five months, it finally paid of when she won a spot in the marathon, for the participants were chosen through a lottery. Out of 38,000, runners Ms. Kellie Arroyo finished the race in 26,795th place with a time of 04:33:08.
    When asked why she wanted to run the marathon in the first place, she replied, “I love NYC and I love running. I also thought it would be cool to see parts of New York I have never seen before, such as the Bronx.” (I believe she said Bronx I’ll double check on Monday.)
    The course of the race loops around the islands of New York City. Starting on Staten Island, the runners ran over the Verrazano-Narrows Bridge onto Brooklyn, along the edge of Brooklyn into the Queens, across Queensboro Bridge onto Manhattan Island, up First Ave., and half way around Central Park to the finish.
    During the race, Ms. Arroyo received encouragement from “a man named Eric with whom [she] had the same pace. When [they] were running though the Bronx, the crowd was very small and quiet. He began cheering, yelling, and encouraging [the other runners] as he [ran] with [them]. [She enjoyed seeing] how his encouragement caused [the] whole group to pick up the pace.”
    Near the finish line, Ms. Arroyo was about to give up. She wanted “to cut her legs off” because it hurt so much. It “hurt [more for her] to walk then run” so she had to keep trucking on. At the end she swore “that [she] would never run again”, but after seeing her “time for the half mark was 1:58… [she] changed [her] mind and decided that [she’d] have to do it again to reach [her] goal [of]…four hours.”
    To anyone else who plans on running a marathon, she suggests “to listen to your body. Injuries are not worth it.” Ms. Arroyo plans to continue running marathons and hopes to be able to participate in the “Seattle marathon and Chicago marathon.”
    Congratulations Ms. Arroyo and good luck on future marathons!

    Arcadia: Home of Runner
    Marathoners: Closer than you Think

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