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    katherinebay

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    Holiday Concert

    Post  katherinebay on Fri Dec 04, 2009 9:14 pm

    When turning on the radio, one hears jolly holiday songs blasting through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. While many of us get ready for winter break preparations, we overlook the fact that many of our musically-inclined peers performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed their way down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within them, hoping they would not make any mistakes. Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show, “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. While playing many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” everyone in the audience could truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, played “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their gleeful songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. New Spirit did just as well, wearing sparkly outfits and impressing everyone that girl power was the key. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazement throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    ** It's at 364 words right now. I still have to get quotes from the choir groups. I'm going to wait for the concert to occur so I can get quotes from some audience members too

    oisheeshemontee

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    Edit #1

    Post  oisheeshemontee on Mon Dec 07, 2009 8:14 pm

    When turning on the radio, one hears jolly holiday songs blasting through the speakers. [Don't use 'one' here - it sounds too formal and awkward, and sort of contrasts with the rest of the paragraph. Try something like: These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers] There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. While many of us get ready for winter break preparations, we overlook the fact that many of our musically-inclined peers performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15. [This is sort of implying that we don't care much about the concert - I don't think you should say that. Use some other lead-in to the topic]

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed their way down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within them [their stomachs], [as they hoped] hoping they would not make any mistakes. Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show, [Change comma to period] “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. While playing many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” [the songs helped] everyone in the audience could truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, played [performing] “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their gleeful songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. New Spirit did just as well, wearing sparkly outfits and impressing everyone that girl power was the key [this is awkward phrasing. Can you rephrase this? Either 'impressing upon everyone' or 'impressing everyone with their']. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied [together] all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazement [amazing clarity, or something like that. Treble Choir wasn't amazed, their audience was] throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    ** It's at 364 words right now. I still have to get quotes from the choir groups. I'm going to wait for the concert to occur so I can get quotes from some audience members too

    katherinebay

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    Re: Holiday Concert

    Post  katherinebay on Mon Dec 07, 2009 10:13 pm

    These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. Many of our musically-inclined peers got a head start in spreading the holiday spirit when Symphony Orchestra, String Orchestra, Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within their stomachs, as they hoped they would not make any mistakes. Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show. “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. While playing many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” the songs helped everyone in the audience truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, performing “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their gleeful songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. New Spirit did just as well, wearing sparkly outfits and impressing everyone with their talent. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied together all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazing clarity throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    nancyxiao

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    Post  nancyxiao on Tue Dec 08, 2009 1:00 pm

    These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. Many of our musically-inclined peers got a head start in spreading the holiday spirit when Symphony Orchestra, String Orchestra, Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within their stomachs, as they hoped they would not make any mistakes. [Despite their nervousness,] Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show. “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. While playing [With] many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of [for] synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” the songs helped everyone in the audience truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, performing “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their gleeful [do you have another adjective?? gleeful is a little weird] songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. New Spirit did just as well, wearing sparkly outfits [this seems a bit random] and impressing everyone with their talent. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied together all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazing clarity throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    katherinebay

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    Join date : 2009-09-01

    Re: Holiday Concert

    Post  katherinebay on Tue Dec 08, 2009 6:22 pm

    These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. Many of our musically-inclined peers got a head start in spreading the holiday spirit when Symphony Orchestra, String Orchestra, Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within their stomachs, as they hoped they would not make any mistakes. Despite their nervousness, Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show. “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. With many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of for synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” the songs helped everyone in the audience truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, performing “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their exciting songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. New Spirit did just as well, impressing everyone with their talent. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied together all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazing clarity throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    oisheeshemontee

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    Edit #3

    Post  oisheeshemontee on Tue Dec 08, 2009 9:05 pm

    These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. Many of our musically-inclined peers got a head start in spreading the holiday spirit when Symphony Orchestra, String Orchestra, Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within their stomachs, as they hoped they would not make any mistakes. Despite their nervousness, Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show. “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. With many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of for synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” the songs helped everyone in the audience truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, performing “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their exciting songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. New Spirit did just as well, impressing everyone with their talent. [These two sentences don't flow very well. Can you maybe combine them or do something to make them less choppy?] After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied together all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazing clarity throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    katherinebay

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    Join date : 2009-09-01

    Re: Holiday Concert

    Post  katherinebay on Wed Dec 09, 2009 12:07 am

    These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. Many of our musically-inclined peers got a head start in spreading the holiday spirit when Symphony Orchestra, String Orchestra, Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within their stomachs, as they hoped they would not make any mistakes. Despite their nervousness, Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show. “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. With many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of for synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” the songs helped everyone in the audience truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, performing “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Their exciting songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. Nevertheless, New Spirit did just as well, impressing everyone with their talent, as they strutted onto the stage with excitement. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied together all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazing clarity throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

    katherinebay

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    Re: Holiday Concert

    Post  katherinebay on Wed Dec 09, 2009 9:31 pm

    FINAL

    These days, every radio station in California is blasting jolly holiday songs through the speakers. There is only one reason for this: the holidays are near. Many of our musically-inclined peers got a head start in spreading the holiday spirit when Symphony Orchestra, String Orchestra, Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir performed in the Holiday Concert on Dec. 15.

    As Symphony Orchestra and String Orchestra headed down to Pasadena High School, butterflies fluttered within their stomachs, as they hoped they would not make any mistakes. Despite their nervousness, Symphony Orchestra was well-prepared for the show. “[They have] been practicing with the band for a couple of weeks, and had a rehearsal with percussion after school to merge them with [Orchestra’s] music,” said cello player sophomore Caleb Man. With many songs, such as “Mendelssohn Concerto,” “Jingle Bells Forever,” and “Canadian Brass,” they amazed the audience with their talent of for synchronism. String Orchestra also had a superb performance, consisting of great music with a holiday twist. From “Holiday Carol Collage,” “Rejoice Greatly,” and “Caribbean Carol,” the songs helped everyone in the audience truly grasp the holiday spirit String Orchestra emitted.

    Chanteurs, New Spirit, Concert Choir, and Treble Choir illustrated their holiday cheer through the act of singing and dancing to festive tunes. Chanteurs rose to the occasion, performing “Sleigh Ride,” “Winter Wonderland,” “Let It Snow, Let It Snow, Let It Snow,” and “You’re a Mean One, Mr. Grinch,” and performed full-out, leaving the audience in awe. Junior Vania Wang described that the purpose of the concert “is to bring a little holiday spirit into the hearts of our community.” Their exciting songs and signature dance moves coordinated perfectly. Nevertheless, New Spirit did just as well, impressing everyone with their talent, as they strutted onto the stage with excitement. After many hours of preparation, New Spirit sang outstanding songs, such as “Happy Holidays,” “Bring Them Home,” “Baby It's Cold Outside,” and “The Old Man’s Back in Town,” and practically tied together all of their numbers with a festive ribbon. Concert Choir and Treble Choir sang with amazing clarity throughout the Holiday Concert as well.

    Those who watched the Holiday Concert left feeling well-spirited and ready to spread holiday joy to all. The show was an amazing collaboration of all of AHS’ wonderful performing arts groups and really showcased what our school had to offer. This was the perfect way to start off the holiday season.

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