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    hanarudolph


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    Post  hanarudolph Fri Dec 04, 2009 12:51 pm

    Ms. Tedford has always taught her students to dream big and aim high. So it is only appropriate that this Charity Dance Show, an annual event organized by her and the Orchesis Dance Company (ODC), should support those without a chance. This year, on Dec. 17, a production lineup consisting of ODC, Color Guard, the Laker Girls, Barcada Modern and many, many more performers will work to raise money for those in third-world countries. The goal for this year's Charity Dance Show is to donate $5000 for girls who are desperately in need of a dream and a chance to fulfill that dream... through the organizations Care and The Girl Effect.
    A paragraph about what Charity Dance Show is about! Put together with Women's Health and Issues, inspired by Half the Sky.
    Of course, ODC will be at the event, performing five pieces-- from classy to sassy to pure entertainment. Ms. Tedford's three beginning dance periods have been gearing up for the event since September, featuring even more dance styles.The girls and boys of Intermediate Dance will perform two pieces: one rock, one musical theater. The latter will be a joint production with Theater 2-- the piece will be a tribute to the history of musical theater, with songs from The Chorus Line, West Side Story, and Hairspray. But Arcadia's talent doesn't end there; the juniors and seniors of Cologuard will be display their talent to It's the Most Wonderful Time. The Arcadia B-Boys will show off their skills, and the Philipino Club will perform a cultural dance called Tinikling.
    On top of all that, the night will feature many professional dancers. As mentioned above, the Laker Girls and Barkada Modern are amongst the favorite guest-performers of the evening. Yet many more will be there: Sahira Dance Company in a Bollywood dance style, and Rhetoracle Dance Company in jazz. Chapman University Dance Team, currently first in the nation for collegiate dance teams, will also be performing for the charitable cause.
    CONCLUSION with quotes such as Ms. Tedford: "I love the Charity Show because of the idea that we can feed our souls and help someone's lives at the same time... Sometimes we get caught up... Dance is the highest form of communication." Key info: Thursday, December 17th in the AHS North Gym, 7:00 p.m. Tickets $10 donation minimum.
    For more information about Care and The Girl Effect, see www.care.org and www.girleffect.org, respectively.
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    Post  hanarudolph Fri Dec 04, 2009 12:52 pm

    I have 402 words right now... still have two more paragraphs but I have random ramblings too so yeah. I should be able to get the rest in this weekend, because I just need to talk to one more person! Smile
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    Post  oisheeshemontee Sun Dec 06, 2009 10:25 pm

    Ms. Tedford has always taught her students to dream big and aim high. So it is only appropriate that this [year's] Charity Dance Show, an annual event organized by her and the Orchesis Dance Company (ODC), should support those without a chance. This year, on Dec. 17, a production lineup consisting of ODC, Color Guard, the Laker Girls, Barcada Modern and many, [delete the comma] many more performers will work to raise money for those [living] in third-world countries. The goal for this year's Charity Dance Show is to donate $5000 for girls who are desperately in need of a dream and a [to give them] chance to fulfill that dream... [why are there ellipses here?] through the organizations Care and The Girl Effect.
    A paragraph about what Charity Dance Show is about! Put together with Women's Health and Issues, inspired by Half the Sky.
    Of course, ODC will be at the event, performing five pieces-- from classy to sassy to pure entertainment. Ms. Tedford's three beginning dance periods have been gearing up for the event since September, featuring even more dance styles. [Random sentence fragment there - put that information elsewhere] The girls and boys of Intermediate Dance will perform two pieces: one rock, one musical theater. The latter will be a joint production with Theater 2-- the piece will be [as] a tribute to the history of musical theater, [it will include] with songs from The Chorus Line, West Side Story, and Hairspray. But Arcadia's talent doesn't end there; the juniors and seniors of Cologuard will be display their talent to It's the Most Wonderful Time. The Arcadia B-Boys will show off their skills, and the Philipino Club will perform a cultural dance called Tinikling.
    On top of all that, the night will feature many professional dancers. As mentioned above, the Laker Girls and Barkada Modern are amongst the favorite guest-performers of the evening. Yet many more will be there: Sahira Dance Company [performing] in a Bollywood dance style, and Rhetoracle Dance Company in jazz. Chapman University Dance Team, currently first in the nation for collegiate dance teams, will also be performing for the charitable cause.
    CONCLUSION with quotes such as Ms. Tedford: "I love the Charity Show because of the idea that we can feed our souls and help someone's lives at the same time... Sometimes we get caught up... Dance is the highest form of communication." Key info: Thursday, December 17th in the AHS North Gym, 7:00 p.m. Tickets $10 donation minimum.
    For more information about Care and The Girl Effect, see www.care.org and www.girleffect.org, respectively..
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    Post  hanarudolph Mon Dec 07, 2009 12:17 pm

    Ms. Tedford has always taught her students to dream big and aim high. So it is only appropriate that this year's Charity Dance Show, an annual event organized by her and the Orchesis Dance Company (ODC), should support those without a chance. This year, on Dec. 17, a production lineup consisting of ODC, Color Guard, the Laker Girls, Barcada Modern and many many more performers will work to raise money for those living in third-world countries. The goal for this year's Charity Dance Show is to donate $5000 for girls who are desperately in need of a dream, giving them a chance to fulfill that dream... through the organizations Care and The Girl Effect. I didn't think it flowed well, that's why I put in an ellipsis. I think it's okay...
    Of course, ODC will be at the event, performing five pieces-- from classy to sassy to pure entertainment. Ms. Tedford's three beginning dance periods have been gearing up for the event since September, featuring even more dance styles. How is that a sentence fragment? The girls and boys of Intermediate Dance will perform two pieces: one rock, one musical theater. The latter will be a joint production with Theater 2-- as a tribute to the history of musical theater, the piece will include songs from The Chorus Line, West Side Story, and Hairspray. But Arcadia's talent doesn't end there; the juniors and seniors of Cologuard will be display their talent to It's the Most Wonderful Time. The Arcadia B-Boys will show off their skills, and the Philipino Club will perform a cultural dance called Tinikling. Orchestra 3 will also be there, providing the music for Orchesis's opening number.
    On top of all that, the night will feature many professional dancers. As mentioned above, the Laker Girls and Barkada Modern are amongst the favorite guest-performers of the evening. Yet many more will be there: Sahira Dance Company performing in a Bollywood dance style, and Rhetoracle Dance Company in jazz. Chapman University Dance Team, currently first in the nation for collegiate dance teams, will also be performing for the charitable cause.
    This is the 16th time Orchesis has produced the Charity Dance Show. Not only is it an opportunity to see an outstanding showcase of performing arts, it is a chance to support the important causes that Care and The Girl Effect represent. Fifty percent of the proceeds will be donated to these organizations-- so every ticket counts! Minimum donations for these tickets are $10 each; the Charity Show will be on Thursday, Dec. 17 in the AHS North Gym and 7:00 p.m. In the words of Ms. Tedford, the event is away to "feed ourselves, and help someone's life at the same time... Sometimes we get caught up, and it's important to realize how much we have in comparison to others." What better way to give to charity than to enjoy a stunning dance show?

    For more information about Care and The Girl Effect, see www.care.org and www.girleffect.org, respectively.
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    Post  oisheeshemontee Mon Dec 07, 2009 8:42 pm

    Ms. Tedford has always taught her students to dream big and aim high. So it is only appropriate that this year's Charity Dance Show, an annual event organized by her and the Orchesis Dance Company (ODC), should support those without a chance. This year, on Dec. 17, a production lineup consisting of ODC, Color Guard, the Laker Girls, Barcada Modern and many many more performers will work to raise money for those living in third-world countries. The goal for this year's Charity Dance Show is to donate $5000 for girls who are desperately in need of a dream, giving them a chance to fulfill that dream... through the organizations Care and The Girl Effect. [I think it's ok if you just take out the ellipsis, it sounds fine]
    Of course, ODC will be at the event, performing five pieces-- from classy to sassy to pure entertainment. Ms. Tedford's three beginning dance periods have been gearing up for the event since September, featuring even more dance styles. [It doesn't flow well with that part at the end, although I guess a sentence fragment isn't the right name for it. I think you should put that information elsewhere. Or change it to "since September, working hard to feature even more"] The girls and boys of Intermediate Dance will perform two pieces: one rock, one musical theater. The latter will be a joint production with Theater 2-- as a tribute to the history of musical theater, the piece will include songs from The Chorus Line, West Side Story, and Hairspray. But Arcadia's talent doesn't end there; the juniors and seniors of Cologuard will be display their talent to It's the Most Wonderful Time. The Arcadia B-Boys will show off their skills, and the Philipino [I'm pretty sure it's Filipino] Club will perform a cultural dance called Tinikling. Orchestra 3 will also be there, providing the music for Orchesis's opening number.
    On top of all that, the night will feature many professional dancers. As mentioned above, the Laker Girls and Barkada Modern are amongst the favorite guest-performers of the evening. Yet many more will be there: Sahira Dance Company[,] performing in a Bollywood dance style [switch dance and style], [change to semicolon, since it's a list] and Rhetoracle Dance Company in jazz. Chapman University Dance Team, currently first in the nation for collegiate dance teams, will also be performing for the charitable cause.
    This is the 16th time Orchesis has produced the Charity Dance Show. Not only is it an opportunity to see an outstanding showcase of performing arts, it is a chance to support the important causes that Care and The Girl Effect represent. Fifty percent of the proceeds will be donated to these organizations-- so every ticket counts! Minimum donations for these tickets are $10 each; the Charity Show will be on Thursday, Dec. 17 in the AHS North Gym and 7:00 p.m. In the words of Ms. Tedford, the event is away to "feed ourselves, and help someone's life at the same time... Sometimes we get caught up, and it's important to realize how much we have in comparison to others." What better way to give to charity than to enjoy a stunning dance show?

    For more information about Care and The Girl Effect, see www.care.org and www.girleffect.org, respectively.
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    Post  hanarudolph Mon Dec 07, 2009 9:10 pm

    Ms. Tedford has always taught her students to dream big and aim high. So it is only appropriate that this year's Charity Dance Show, an annual event organized by her and the Orchesis Dance Company (ODC), should support those without a chance. This year, on Dec. 17, a production lineup consisting of ODC, Color Guard, the Laker Girls, Barcada Modern and many many more performers will work to raise money for those living in third-world countries. The goal for this year's Charity Dance Show is to donate $5000 for girls who are desperately in need of a dream, giving them a chance to fulfill that dream through the organizations Care and The Girl Effect.
    Of course, ODC will be at the event, performing five pieces-- from classy to sassy to pure entertainment. Since September, Ms. Tedford's three beginning dance periods have been gearing up for the event, featuring even more dance styles. The girls and boys of Intermediate Dance will perform two pieces: one rock, one musical theater. The latter will be a joint production with Theater 2-- as a tribute to the history of musical theater, the piece will include songs from The Chorus Line, West Side Story, and Hairspray. But Arcadia's talent doesn't end there; the juniors and seniors of Cologuard will be display their talent to It's the Most Wonderful Time. The Arcadia B-Boys will show off their skills, and the Flipino Club will perform a cultural dance called Tinikling. Orchestra 3 will also be there, providing the music for Orchesis's opening number.
    On top of all that, the night will feature many professional dancers. As mentioned above, the Laker Girls and Barkada Modern are amongst the favorite guest-performers of the evening. Yet many more will be there: Sahira Dance Company performing in a Bollywood-style dance, and Rhetoracle Dance Company in jazz. Chapman University Dance Team, currently first in the nation for collegiate dance teams, will also be performing for the charitable cause.
    This is the 16th time Orchesis has produced the Charity Dance Show. Not only is it an opportunity to see an outstanding showcase of performing arts, it is a chance to support the important causes that Care and The Girl Effect represent. Fifty percent of the proceeds will be donated to these organizations-- so every ticket counts! Minimum donations for these tickets are $10 each; the Charity Show will be on Thursday, Dec. 17 in the AHS North Gym and 7:00 p.m. In the words of Ms. Tedford, the event is away to "feed ourselves, and help someone's life at the same time... Sometimes we get caught up, and it's important to realize how much we have in comparison to others." What better way to give to charity than to enjoy a stunning dance show?

    For more information about Care and The Girl Effect, see www.care.org and www.girleffect.org, respectively.

    I think what you're trying to say is that it's a misplaced modifier- and yeah, you're right. :]
    But I don't agree with the semicolon for listing because you only use a semicolon so that the multiple commas aren't confusing-- and I'm pretty sure I don't need a comma after Company.... so there's no need for the semicolon. I could be wrong, but yeah...
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    Post  oisheeshemontee Tue Dec 08, 2009 8:55 pm

    All right - it sounds fine either way Very Happy
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    Post  hanarudolph Wed Dec 09, 2009 12:25 pm

    Ms. Tedford has always taught her students to dream big and aim high. So it is only appropriate that this year's Charity Dance Show, an annual event organized by her and the Orchesis Dance Company (ODC), should support those without a chance. This year, on Dec. 17, a production lineup consisting of ODC, Color Guard, the Laker Girls, Barcada Modern and many many more performers will work to raise money for those living in third-world countries. The goal for this year's Charity Dance Show is to donate $5000 for girls who are desperately in need of a dream, giving them a chance to fulfill that dream through the organizations Care and The Girl Effect.
    Of course, ODC will be at the event, performing five pieces-- from classy to sassy to pure entertainment. Since September, Ms. Tedford's three beginning dance periods have been gearing up for the event, featuring even more dance styles. The girls and boys of Intermediate Dance will perform two pieces: one rock, one musical theater. The latter will be a joint production with Theater 2-- as a tribute to the history of musical theater, the piece will include songs from The Chorus Line, West Side Story, and Hairspray. But Arcadia's talent doesn't end there; the juniors and seniors of Cologuard will be display their talent to It's the Most Wonderful Time. The Arcadia B-Boys will show off their skills, and the Filipino Club will perform a cultural dance called Tinikling. Even Orchestra 3 will be there, providing the music for ODC's opening number.
    On top of all that, the night will feature many professional dancers. As mentioned above, the Laker Girls and Barkada Modern are amongst the favorite guest-performers of the evening. Yet the list does not end there: Sahira Dance Company performing in a Bollywood-style dance, and Rhetoracle Dance Company in jazz. Chapman University Dance Team, currently first in the nation for collegiate dance teams, will also be performing for the charitable cause.
    This is the 16th time ODC has produced the Charity Dance Show. Not only is it an opportunity to see an outstanding showcase of performing arts, it is a chance to support the important causes that Care and The Girl Effect represent. Fifty percent of the proceeds will be donated to these organizations-- so every ticket counts! Minimum donations for these tickets are $10 each; the Charity Show will be on Thursday, Dec. 17 in the AHS North Gym at 7:00 p.m. In the words of Ms. Tedford, the event is a way to "feed ourselves, and help someone's life at the same time... Sometimes we get caught up, and it's important to realize how much we have in comparison to others." What better way to give to charity than to enjoy a stunning dance show?

    For more information about Care and The Girl Effect, see www.care.org and www.girleffect.org, respectively.

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