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    Post  amyleong Tue May 11, 2010 2:10 am

    Other Titles:
    A Trip Down Memory Lane
    A Blast to the Past
    The Mystery of Our History
    A Time with Cheap Prices and Less Devices
    Once Upon a Dream

    The Lion King, as you all know is a popular Disney film that is not only has significant because it follows the hero’s journey and displays various archetypes, but sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a chapter in our lives, the year we came into this world.
    But not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Popular musicians included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket costs about $10, during 1994 a movie ticket costs only $4.08, which is almost the same price of our school lunch. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents.
    However, aside from the costs, the year of 1994 also had some interesting events including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in Southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games were held in Lillehammer, Norway. As for technology, the world’s first satellite digital television service launched and the java programming language first released from Sun Microsystems.
    Now that we know a little bit more during sophomore year, let’s travel a year back to junior year in 1993. Let’s start off with college, since junior year is the most difficult and hardest years. The tuition to Harvard University was $23,514, while the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and costs $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.
    This year also stands significant because it was the year that Bill Clinton was president of the United States, there was a magnitude 7.8 earthquake in Hokkaido, Japan, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year for popular film, Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. Madonna and Nirvana also were popular artists of the time.
    Seniors take it away with more excitement of our past. Because snacks are so important to us like seniors are, let’s head to the category of food. Touching upon the subject of food, a pound of bacon costs $1.92 and a hamburger costs around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    On the other hand, as to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, China, Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The Average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. Also during this year, OJ Simpson is found innocent and there is a volcanic eruption in the island of Montserrat. As for technology, Windows 95 is produced and well as the introduction of DVD’s. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji.
    The next time you watch Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to a year when you entered the world. Recalling on the past always hold some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD.
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    Post  amyleong Wed May 12, 2010 9:52 pm

    The Lion King, as you all know is a popular Disney film that is not only has significant because it follows the hero’s journey and displays various archetypes, but sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a chapter in our lives, the year we came into this world.
    But not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Following with popular films, celebrities Dakota Fanning, Justin Bieber, and Jake T. Austin were born in 1994 and are currently the same age as sophomores. Popular musicians also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket costs about $10, during 1994 a movie ticket costs only $4.08, which is almost the same price of our school lunch. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents.
    However, aside from the costs, the year of 1994 also had some interesting events including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in Southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games were held in Lillehammer, Norway. As for technology, the world’s first satellite digital television service launched and the java programming language first released from Sun Microsystems.
    Now that we know a little bit more during sophomore year, let’s travel a year back to junior year in 1993. Let’s start off with college, since junior year is the most difficult and hardest years. The tuition to Harvard University was $23,514, while the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and costs $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.
    This year also stands significant because it was the year that Bill Clinton was president of the United States, there was a magnitude 7.8 earthquake in Hokkaido, Japan, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year for popular film, Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. In addition, it was also the year that the first Power Rangers television show came out, and the toys based on this show was a major hit. But do you know what else was a major hit? Madonna and Nirvana were also popular artists of the time.
    Seniors take it away with more excitement of our past. Because snacks are so important to us like seniors are, let’s head to the category of food. Touching upon the subject of food, a pound of bacon costs $1.92 and a hamburger costs around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    On the other hand, as to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, China, Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos. Along with television shows, popular celebrities Cole and Dylan Sprouse, Demi Lovato, and Taylor Lautner were also born in 1992.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The Average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson is found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption in the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer wiz’s out there, Windows 95 is finally produced and well as the introduction of DVD’s. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.
    The next time you watch Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to a year when you entered the world. Recalling on the past always hold some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD. Like a Star @ heaven
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    Post  oisheeshemontee Sat May 15, 2010 4:35 pm

    The Lion King [italicize], as you all know is a popular Disney film that is not only has [delete the 'has'] significant because it follows the [archetypal] hero’s journey [delete this next part about displaying various archetypes, it's unnecessary] and displays various archetypes, but [also because it has] sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out [the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS,] in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a chapter [I think bookmark makes more sense right here, and it would fit better] in our lives, [replace comma with 'for'] the year we came into this world.
    But [Delete but, replace with 'When we came into this world,] not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Following with popular films, [Delete 'following with popular films] celebrities [such as] Dakota Fanning, Justin Bieber, and Jake T. Austin were [also] born in 1994 and are currently the same age as sophomores [um this last part's kind of a duh. I don't think you need to say they are the same age]. Popular musicians [of the time] also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket costs about $10, during 1994 a movie ticket costs only $4.08, which is almost the same price of [change of to as] our school lunch. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents.
    However, aside from the costs, [Start the sentence here, you don't need that first bit] the year of 1994 also had [change had to included] some interesting events[,] including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in Southeastern [no capitalization for southeastern] United States, and the Winter Olympic Games were [delete were] held in Lillehammer, Norway. As for technology, the world’s first satellite digital television service [was] launched and the java programming language first released from Sun Microsystems.
    Now that we know a little bit more [about what happened the year sophomores were born] during sophomore year, let’s travel a year back to [the year of the juniors' birth] junior year in 1993. Let’s start off with college [some college facts], since junior year is the most difficult and hardest years. The tuition to [for] Harvard University was $23,514, while the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and costs $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before. [It's kind of random to say, let's start of with college, and then only have one fact about it. Maybe you could find more facts about colleges in 1993, so it works better?]
    This year also stands significant [stands out significantly as the year that a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan. The Bill Clinton thing is kind of random in the middle, I think you should either delete it, or place it somewhere else.] because it was the year that Bill Clinton was president of the United States, there was a magnitude 7.8 earthquake in Hokkaido, Japan, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year for popular film [It was also the year that many popular films were released, including] , Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. In addition, [the first Power Rangers television show premiered in 1993, and the toys...] it was also the year that the first Power Rangers television show came out, and the toys based on this show was [replace was with became] a major hit. But do you know what else was a major hit? Madonna and Nirvana were also popular artists of the time.
    Seniors take it away with more excitement [from our past] of our past. Because snacks are so important to us like seniors are [LOL it sounds like you want to eat seniors or something, can you think of a different transition?] , let’s head to the category of food. Touching upon the subject of food, [This first part seems a bit repetitive, just start the sentence here] a pound of bacon costs [cost] $1.92 and a hamburger costs [cost] around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    On the other hand, [Delete 'on the other hand,' start sentence here] as to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, China, [I don't think you really need the China, Beijing's enough for people to know where you're talking about] Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft[,] along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos. Along with television shows, [That's not really that great of a transition, either replace it or just start the sentence here] popular celebrities Cole and Dylan Sprouse, Demi Lovato, and Taylor Lautner were also born in 1992.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The Average [no capitalization on average] cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson is found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption in [on] the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer wiz’s [whizzes] out there, Windows 95 is finally produced and [DVD's are introduced] well as the introduction of DVD’s. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.
    The next time you watch Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to a [the] year when you entered the world. Recalling on [delete on] the past always hold some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD.
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    Post  amyleong Mon May 17, 2010 12:05 pm

    The Lion King, as you all know is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a bookmark in our lives for the year we came into this world. When we came into this world, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Following celebrities such as Dakota Fanning, Justin Bieber, and Jake T. Austin were also born in 1994. Popular musicians of the time also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket costs about $10, during 1994 a movie ticket costs only $4.08, which is almost the same price of change of to as our school lunch. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents.
    The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games held in Lillehammer, Norway. As for technology, the world’s first satellite digital television service was launched and the java programming language first released from Sun Microsystems.
    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the year of the juniors' birth in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts. The tuition for Harvard University was $23,514, while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.
    This year also stands out significantly as the year that a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan, Harley Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released, including, Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. In addition, the first Power Rangers television show premiered in 1993, and the toys based on this show became a major hit. But do you know what else was a major hit? Madonna and Nirvana were also popular artists of the time.
    Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because food is vital to our daily lives, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos. Popular celebrities Cole and Dylan Sprouse, Demi Lovato, and Taylor Lautner were also born in 1992.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson is found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 is finally produced and DVD's are introduced. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.
    The next time you watch Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always hold some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD.
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    Post  amyleong Mon May 17, 2010 7:27 pm

    The Lion King, as you all know is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, but also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a bookmark in our lives for the year we came into this world. Upon our arrival, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Celebrities such as Dakota Fanning, Justin Bieber, and Jake T. Austin were also born in 1994. Popular musicians of the time also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket cost about $10, during 1994 a movie ticket costs only $4.08, which is almost the same price as our school lunch. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents.
    The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games held in Lillehammer, Norway. As for technology, the world’s first satellite digital television service was launched and the java programming language first released from Sun Microsystems.
    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the year of the juniors' birth in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts. The tuition for Harvard University was $23,514, while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.
    This year also stands out significantly as the year that a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan, Harley Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released, including, Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. In addition, the first Power Rangers television show premiered in 1993, and the toys based on this show became a major hit. But do you know what else was a major hit? Madonna and Nirvana were also popular artists of the time.
    Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because snacks are so delicious, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos. Popular celebrities Cole and Dylan Sprouse, Demi Lovato, and Taylor Lautner were also born in 1992.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson is found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 is finally produced and DVD's are introduced. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.
    The next time you watch The Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always holds some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD.
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    Post  oisheeshemontee Tue May 18, 2010 11:24 am

    The Lion King, as you all know[,] is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, but also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a bookmark in our lives for the year we came into this world. Upon our arrival, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Celebrities such as Dakota Fanning, Justin Bieber, and Jake T. Austin were also born in 1994. Popular musicians of the time also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket cost about $10, during 1994 [in 1994,] a movie ticket costs [cost] only $4.08, which is almost the same price as our school lunch [today]. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents.
    The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games held in Lillehammer, Norway. As for technology, the world’s first satellite digital television service was launched and the [delete 'the'] java programming language first released from Sun Microsystems.
    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the [birth of the juniors in 1993.] year of the juniors' birth in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts. The tuition for Harvard University was $23,514, while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.
    This year also stands [stood] out significantly as the year that a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan, Harley Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released, including, Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. In addition, the first Power Rangers television show premiered in 1993, and the toys based on this show became a major hit. But do you know what else was a major hit? Madonna and Nirvana were also popular artists of the time.
    Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because snacks are so delicious, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos. Popular celebrities Cole and Dylan Sprouse, Demi Lovato, and Taylor Lautner were also born in 1992.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson is [was] found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 is finally produced and DVD's are introduced. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.
    The next time you watch The Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always holds some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD.

    [ITALICIZE THE NAMES OF ALL MOVIES, PLEASE!!]
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    Post  amyleong Sat May 22, 2010 3:49 pm

    Imagine a time when you were young and able to run free, without worries of homework, or tests, or quizzes. Think of the expenses of weekend activities such as going to the movie theater, colleges, and even buying some food at the grocery store. Well, for those of you who are interested, here’s some insight about what happened the year you were born, so let’s begin your adventure with a blast into the past.
    The Lion King, as you all know, is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, but also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, in the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds this special significance of being a bookmark in our lives for the year we came into this world.
    Upon our arrival, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Popular musicians of the time also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket cost about $10, in 1994, a movie ticket cost only $4.08, which is almost the same price as our school lunch today. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents. The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games held in Lillehammer, Norway.
    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the birth of the juniors in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts. The tuition for Harvard University was $23,514, while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.
    This year also stood out significantly as the year that a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan, Harley Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released, including, Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because snacks are so delicious, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.
    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opens up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes strike the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows include “Rugrats”, “Law and Order”, and “America’s Funniest Home Videos”.
    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marks the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson was found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 is finally produced and DVD's are introduced. Popular movies also include Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.
    The next time you watch The Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down memory lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always holds some significance, especially when Disney movies were your favorite or the excitement of buying the first DVD.

    P.S. All the movies are italicized. They just don't appear that way on the forum.
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    Post  katherinebay Sun May 23, 2010 10:58 am

    Imagine a time when you were young and able to run freely, without any worries of homework, tests, or quizzes. Think of the expenses of going to the movie theater, college tuition, or even buying some food at the grocery store. Here’s some insight about what happened the year you were born; so let’s begin your adventure with a blast into the past.

    The Lion King, as you all know, is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, but also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds a special significance of being a bookmark in our lives for the year we came into this world.

    Upon our arrival, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Popular musicians of the time also included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket cost about $10, in 1994, a movie ticket cost only $4.08, which is almost the same price as our school lunch today. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents. The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games held in Lillehammer, Norway.

    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the birth of the juniors in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts: the tuition for Harvard University was $23,514 while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.

    The year of1993 also stood out significantly because that was when a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan, Harley Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released; including Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because snacks are so delicious, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.

    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opened up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes struck the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows included Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos.

    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marked the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson was found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 was finally produced and DVD's were introduced. Popular movies also consisted of Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.

    The next time you watch The Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down Memory Lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always holds some significance, especially when watching Disney movies were your favorite pastime or the excitement of buying your first DVD filled the air.
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    Imagine a time when you were young and able to run freely, without any worries of homework, tests, or quizzes. [A time when you never had to] Think of the expenses of going to the movie theater, college tuition, or even buying some food at the grocery store. Here’s some insight about what happened the year you were born; so let’s begin your ['the' sounds better] adventure with a blast into the past.

    The Lion King, as you all know, is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, but also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds a special significance of being a bookmark [holds special significance as a bookmark of the year they came into this world.] in our lives for the year we came into this world.

    Upon our [their] arrival, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Popular musicians of the time also [delete also] included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket cost[s] about $10, in 1994, a movie ticket cost only $4.08, which is almost the same price as our school lunch today. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents. The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games [being] held in Lillehammer, Norway.

    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the birth of the juniors in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts: the tuition for Harvard University was $23,514 while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.

    The year of 1993 also stood out significantly because that was when a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan, [Separate sentences here - earthquakes are more important than Harley-Davidson Motorcycles, don't group them in the same category] Harley[-]Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary, and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released; [change semicolon to comma] including Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle. [Start a new paragraph here] Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because snacks are so delicious, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.

    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first [international] restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opened up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes struck the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows included Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos.

    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marked the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson was found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 was finally produced and DVD's were introduced. Popular movies also consisted of Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.

    The next time you watch The Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down Memory Lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always holds some significance, especially when watching Disney movies were your favorite pastime or the excitement of buying your first DVD filled the air.

    [I think the whole article could have flowed better if it went in order - either from freshmen to seniors or seniors to freshmen. Starting with sophomores and jumping around seems a little random. If there's still time to rearrange it, i suggest you do so, but otherwise, it's fine, I guess...]
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    FINAL

    Imagine a time when you were young and able to run freely, without any worries of homework, tests, or quizzes. A time when you never had to think of the expenses of going to the movie theater, college tuition, or even buying some food at the grocery store. Here’s some insight about what happened the year you were born; so let’s begin the adventure with a blast into the past.

    The Lion King, as you all know, is a popular Disney film that is not only significant because it follows the archetypal hero’s journey, but also because it has sprouted from our childhood as one of the movies that came out the same year as most of the sophomores in AHS, the year 1994. For sophomores, The Lion King holds special significance as a bookmark of the year they came into this world

    Upon our their arrival, not only was this Disney movie popular, but also Forrest Gump, Star Trek, and The Flintstones. Popular musicians of the time included Phil Collins, Aerosmith, Snoop Dogg, Celine Dion, and the Rolling Stones. While today’s movie ticket costs about $10, in 1994, a movie ticket cost only $4.08, which is almost the same price as our school lunch today. The average cost of a new car was $12,350, while a dozen eggs only cost about 86 cents. The year of 1994 also included some interesting events, including OJ Simpson fleeing from court, a tornado in southeastern United States, and the Winter Olympic Games being held in Lillehammer, Norway.

    Now that we know a little bit more about what happened the year sophomores were born, let’s travel a year back to the birth of the juniors in 1993. Let’s start off with some college facts: the tuition for Harvard University was $23,514 while the college tuition at UC schools was only $3,540. In addition, the cost of a new car was $12,750. Movie ticket prices went up by 6 cents and cost $4.14, generally around the same price as the year before.

    The year of 1993 also stood out significantly because that was when a magnitude 7.8 earthquake hit Hokkaido, Japan. Furthermore, Harley-Davidson Motorcycles celebrated their 90th anniversary and Ty Warner USA launched the first Beanie Babies. It was also the year that many popular films were released; including Jurassic Park, Robin Hood, and Sleepless in Seattle.

    Seniors take it away with more excitement from our past. Because snacks are so delicious, let’s head to the category of food. A pound of bacon cost $1.92 and a hamburger cost around 60 cents. A 20 ounce pack of Oreo’s was also $1.99.

    As to historical events, McDonald’s opened their first international restaurant in Beijing, Euro Disney opened up in France, and two of the strongest earthquakes struck the desert area east of Los Angeles. Windows 3.1 was also released by Microsoft, along with AT&T releasing their first video telephone. Popular television shows included Rugrats, Law and Order, and America’s Funniest Home Videos.

    Last but not least, the year of 1995 marked the year of freshmen as well as the yearly inflation rate of 2.81%. The average cost of a new car was $15,500, while a dozen eggs cost 87 cents. As for the topic of historical events, OJ Simpson was found innocent and there was a volcanic eruption on the island of Montserrat. Also during this year, Steve Fossett was the first person to make a flight across the Pacific Ocean in a hot air balloon. For all the computer whizzes out there, Windows 95 was finally produced and DVD's were introduced. Popular movies also consisted of Toy Story, Pocahontas, and Jumanji. Along with popular movies, the most popular musicians were Weezer, Mariah Carey, and Janet Jackson.

    The next time you watch The Lion King, head to the movies, or even open your history textbook, take a trip down Memory Lane to the year when you entered the world. The past always holds some significance, especially when watching Disney movies were your favorite pastime or the excitement of buying your first DVD filled the air.

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