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    katherinebay

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    2010 Events

    Post  katherinebay on Tue May 11, 2010 9:18 pm

    As the year comes to an end and summer rolls right on by, it’s best we all go have a look down the road and take a moment to recap everything that has happened, both locally and nationally. Throughout the school year, a lot has happened outside of the bubble we students have created within AHS. From deadly earthquakes to Mirai Nagusu placing fourth in the Olympics, all of these unforgettable events have a special place in our memory boxes.

    Earthquake Mania: Instead of starting off the year of 2010 on a high note, ghastly earthquakes have occurred throughout the entire world; the ones in Haiti and Chile have had the largest impact thus far. With a catastrophic magnitude of 7.0, Haiti and all of its inhabitants suffered a great deal while the country ended in ruins. Chile had an even larger magnitude of 8.8 as their damages not only affected them but numerous other countries as well.

    Mirai Nagusu: Arcadia’s very own Mirai Nagasu traveled all the way to Vancouver to compete in the world-wide Olympics, which in itself was already a huge accomplishment for both her and Arcadia. She made us proud as she skated her heart out and surprisingly received fourth place, which was outstanding considering it was her first time participating.

    Highest Grossing Films: For the year 2009, Avatar took the place of the highest grossing movie worldwide as it astonished its audience with its amazing cinematography and direction. As it intertwined the usage of both human and fictional cartoon-like characters, both the plot and special effects were surreal. So far, Alice in Wonderland is the highest grossing film for the year 2010 because of its intricate and detailed graphics found in the characters overall appearance and the general locations of each scenes.

    Neanderthal Genome Project: Scientists have proven that Homo sapiens are indeed related to humans. Neanderthals and humans have been said to be genetically linked through a similar genome, thus confirming that our mixture of genes are actually related to one another.

    Solar Eclipse: On Jan. 15, 2010, the longest solar eclipse of the millennium occurred, where the moon partially covered Earth’s view of the sun for about 11 minutes.

    Since the school year is almost over, don’t forget all of the intriguing events that have happened from Sep. of 2009 to Jun. of 2010. As summer approaches oh so quickly, watch out for even more unique events as the year of 2010 continues on by.

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    Post  oisheeshemontee on Tue May 18, 2010 7:17 pm

    As the [school] year comes to an end and summer rolls right on by, it’s best we all go have a look down the road and take a moment to recap everything that has happened, both locally and nationally. Throughout the school year, a lot has happened outside of the bubble we students have created within AHS. From deadly earthquakes to Mirai Nagusu placing fourth in the Olympics, all of these unforgettable events have a special place in our memory boxes [it sounds better to just say memories].

    Earthquake Mania: Instead of starting off the year of [delete 'the year of'] 2010 on a high note, [a series of] ghastly earthquakes have occurred throughout the entire world; the ones in Haiti and Chile have had the largest impact thus far. With a catastrophic magnitude of 7.0, Haiti and all of its inhabitants suffered a great deal while the country ended in ruins. Chile had an even larger magnitude of 8.8 as their damages [was it Chile's damages that affected other countries or the earthquake?] not only affected them but numerous other countries as well.

    Mirai Nagusu: Arcadia’s very own Mirai Nagasu traveled all the way to Vancouver to compete in the world-wide [world-renowned Winter Olympics] Olympics, which in itself was already a huge accomplishment for both her and Arcadia. She made us proud as she skated her heart out and surprisingly [delete 'surprisingly, it sounds condescending] received fourth place, which was outstanding considering it was her first time participating.

    Highest Grossing Films: For the year 2009, Avatar took the place of the highest grossing movie worldwide as it astonished its audience with its amazing cinematography and direction. As it intertwined the usage [use] of both human and fictional cartoon-like characters [awkward phrasing - it sounds like the cartoon-like characters were both human and fictional], both the plot and special effects were surreal. So far, Alice in Wonderland is the highest grossing film for the year 2010 because of its intricate and detailed graphics found in the characters['] overall appearance and the general locations of each scenes [scene].

    Neanderthal Genome Project: Scientists have proven that Homo sapiens [italicize] are indeed related to humans. Neanderthals and humans have been said to be genetically linked through a similar genome, thus confirming that our mixture of genes are actually related [end sentence here] to one another.

    Solar Eclipse: On Jan. 15, 2010, the longest solar eclipse of the millennium occurred, where the moon partially covered Earth’s view of the sun for about 11 minutes.

    Since the school year is almost over, don’t forget all of the intriguing events that have happened from Sep. of 2009 to Jun. of 2010 [since you're writing about these months, and they're not in a specific date, I think you should write out the full name, it looks strange otherwise]. As summer approaches oh so quickly, watch out for even more unique events as the year of 2010 continues on [end sentence here, delete 'by']z by.

    katherinebay

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    Re: 2010 Events

    Post  katherinebay on Tue May 18, 2010 7:30 pm

    As the school year comes to an end and summer rolls right on by, it’s best we all go have a look down the road and take a moment to recap everything that has happened, both locally and nationally. Throughout the school year, a lot has happened outside of the bubble we students have created within AHS. From deadly earthquakes to Mirai Nagusu placing fourth in the Olympics, all of these unforgettable events have a special place in our memory.

    Earthquake Mania: Instead of starting off the 2010 on a high note, a series of ghastly earthquakes have occurred throughout the entire world; the ones in Haiti and Chile have had the largest impact thus far. With a catastrophic magnitude of 7.0, Haiti and all of its inhabitants suffered a great deal while the country ended in ruins. Chile had an even larger magnitude of 8.8 as their damages not only affected them but numerous other countries as well.

    Mirai Nagusu: Arcadia’s very own Mirai Nagasu traveled all the way to Vancouver to compete in the world-renowned Winter Olympics, which in itself was already a huge accomplishment for both her and Arcadia. She made us proud as she skated her heart out and received fourth place, which was outstanding considering it was her first time participating.

    Highest Grossing Films: For the year 2009, Avatar took the place of the highest grossing movie worldwide as it astonished its audience with its amazing cinematography and direction. As it intertwined the use of both human and cartoon-like characters, both the plot and special effects were surreal. So far, Alice in Wonderland is the highest grossing film for the year 2010 because of its intricate and detailed graphics found in the characters' overall appearance and the general locations of each scene.

    Neanderthal Genome Project: Scientists have proven that Homo sapiens are indeed related to humans. Neanderthals and humans have been said to be genetically linked through a similar genome, thus confirming that our mixture of genes are actually related.

    Solar Eclipse: On Jan. 15, 2010, the longest solar eclipse of the millennium occurred, where the moon partially covered Earth’s view of the sun for about 11 minutes.

    Since the school year is almost over, don’t forget all of the intriguing events that have happened from September of 2009 to June of 2010. As summer approaches oh so quickly, watch out for even more unique events as the year of 2010 continues on.

    katherinebay

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    Re: 2010 Events

    Post  katherinebay on Sun May 23, 2010 11:20 am

    As the school year comes to an end and summer rolls right on by, it’s best we all go have a look down the road and take a moment to recap everything that has happened, both locally and nationally. Throughout the school year, a lot has happened outside of the bubble we students have created within AHS. From deadly earthquakes to Mirai Nagusu placing fourth in the Olympics, all of these unforgettable events have a special place in our memory.

    Earthquake Mania: Instead of starting off the 2010 on a high note, a series of ghastly earthquakes have occurred throughout the entire world; the ones in Haiti and Chile have had the largest impact thus far. When Haiti had a catastrophic magnitude of 7.0, all of its inhabitants suffered a great deal while the country ended in ruins. Chile had an even larger magnitude of 8.8 as their damages not only affected them but numerous other countries as well.

    Mirai Nagusu: Arcadia’s very own Mirai Nagasu traveled all the way to Vancouver, Canada to compete in the world-renowned Winter Olympics, which in itself was already a huge accomplishment for both her and Arcadia. She made us proud as she skated her heart out and received fourth place, which was outstanding considering it was her first time participating.

    Highest Grossing Films: For the year 2009, Avatar took the place of the highest grossing movie worldwide as it astonished its audience with its amazing cinematography and direction. As it intertwined the use of both human and cartoon-like characters, both the plot and special effects were surreal. So far, Alice in Wonderland is the highest grossing film for the year 2010 because of its intricate and detailed graphics found in the characters' overall appearance and the general locations of each scene.

    Neanderthal Genome Project: Scientists have proven that Homo sapiens are indeed related to humans. Neanderthals and humans have been said to be genetically linked through a similar genome, thus confirming that our mixture of genes are actually related.

    Solar Eclipse: On Jan. 15, 2010, the longest solar eclipse of the millennium occurred, where the moon partially covered Earth’s view of the sun for about 11 minutes.

    Since the school year is almost over, don’t forget all of the intriguing events that have happened from September of 2009 to June of 2010. As summer approaches oh so quickly, watch out for even more unique events as the year of 2010 continues on.

    oisheeshemontee

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    Post  oisheeshemontee on Sun May 23, 2010 6:19 pm

    As the school year comes to an end and summer rolls right on by, it’s best we all go have [just say 'take' instead of 'go have'. or you can say, 'we commemorate the beginning of summer by taking a look down the road and recapping everything'] a look down the road and take a moment to recap everything that has happened, both locally and nationally. Throughout the school year, a lot has happened outside of the bubble we students have created within AHS. From deadly earthquakes to Mirai Nagusu placing fourth in the Olympics, all of these unforgettable events have [occupy] a special place in our memory.

    Earthquake Mania: Instead of starting off the [delete 'the'] 2010 on a high note, a series of ghastly earthquakes have occurred throughout the entire world; the ones in Haiti and Chile have had the largest impact thus far. When Haiti had a catastrophic magnitude [only earthquakes can have magnitudes, not countries. Haiti experienced an earthquake of catastrophic magnitude] of 7.0, all of its inhabitants suffered a great deal while the country ended in ruins [um, a little too dramatic here...Haiti hasn't ended, just suffered. Think of some other way to phrase this sentence]. Chile had an even larger [earthquake of magnitude 8.8] magnitude of 8.8 as their [the earthquake's damage] damages not only affected them but numerous other countries as well.

    Mirai Nagusu: Arcadia’s very own Mirai Nagasu traveled all the way to Vancouver, Canada to compete in the world-renowned Winter Olympics, which in itself was already a huge accomplishment for both her and Arcadia. She made us proud as she skated her heart out and received fourth place, which was outstanding [,especially] considering it was her first time participating.

    Highest Grossing Films: For the year 2009, Avatar took the place of the highest grossing movie worldwide as it astonished its audience with its amazing cinematography and direction. As it intertwined the use of both human and cartoon-like characters, both the plot and special effects were surreal. So far, Alice in Wonderland is the highest[-]grossing film for the year 2010 because of its intricate and detailed graphics found in the characters' overall appearance and the general locations [location] of each scene.

    Neanderthal Genome Project: Scientists have proven that Homo sapiens are indeed related to humans. Neanderthals and humans have been said to be genetically linked through a similar genome, thus confirming that our mixture of genes are actually related.

    Solar Eclipse: On Jan. 15, 2010, the longest solar eclipse of the millennium occurred, where the moon partially covered Earth’s view of the sun for about 11 minutes.

    Since [Even though] the school year is almost over, don’t forget all of the intriguing events that have happened from September of 2009 to June of 2010. As summer approaches oh so quickly, watch out for even more unique events as the year of 2010 continues on.

    katherinebay

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    Join date : 2009-09-01

    Re: 2010 Events

    Post  katherinebay on Sun May 23, 2010 10:24 pm

    We commemorate the beginning of summer by taking a look down the road and recapping everything that has happened, both locally and nationally. Throughout the school year, a lot has happened outside of the bubble we students have created within AHS. From deadly earthquakes to Mirai Nagusu placing fourth in the Olympics, all of these unforgettable events occupy a special place in our memory.

    Earthquake Mania: Instead of starting off 2010 on a high note, a series of ghastly earthquakes have occurred throughout the entire world; the ones in Haiti and Chile have had the largest impact thus far. When Haiti’s earthquake had a catastrophic magnitude of 7.0, all of its inhabitants suffered a great deal. Chile had an even larger earthquake of magnitude 8.8 as the earthquake's damage not only affected them but numerous other countries as well.

    Mirai Nagusu: Arcadia’s very own Mirai Nagasu traveled all the way to Vancouver, Canada to compete in the world-renowned Winter Olympics, which in itself was already a huge accomplishment for both her and Arcadia. She made us proud as she skated her heart out and received fourth place, which was outstanding, especially considering it was her first time participating.

    Highest-grossing Films: For the year 2009, Avatar took the place of the highest grossing movie worldwide as it astonished its audience with its amazing cinematography and direction. As it intertwined the use of both human and cartoon-like characters, both the plot and special effects were surreal. So far, Alice in Wonderland is the highest-grossing film for the year 2010 because of its intricate and detailed graphics found in the characters' overall appearance and the general location of each scene.

    Neanderthal Genome Project: Scientists have proven that Homo sapiens are indeed related to humans. Neanderthals and humans have been said to be genetically linked through a similar genome, thus confirming that our mixture of genes are actually related.

    Solar Eclipse: On Jan. 15, 2010, the longest solar eclipse of the millennium occurred, where the moon partially covered Earth’s view of the sun for about 11 minutes.

    Even though the school year is almost over, don’t forget all of the intriguing events that have happened from September of 2009 to June of 2010. As summer approaches oh so quickly, watch out for even more unique events as the year of 2010 continues on.

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