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    annanaran

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    AHS resolutions

    Post  annanaran on Thu Dec 03, 2009 10:55 pm

    New Year’s resolutions are full of “get all straight A’s” or “no more cussing,” or even “cut back on junk food.” Some resolutions are easily kept, others not so much. While you may see your teachers at their desks, brainstorming the best possible resolution, or even Mr. Vannasdall in his office pondering one, very few of those well thought out resolutions benefit our very own AHS. AHS is a great school, but always has room for improvements. Why not create a resolution for AHS itself? With over 4,000 bright and young brains scattered throughout the endless AHS halls, there has to be at least one that can think of a great resolution that can enable AHS to be the best it can be. All it takes is one simple thought that can lead a galaxy of change.

    Keeping the enormous, populated campus of AHS clean is a bit of a challenge however, many students are ready to set resolutions to help keep the school spotless. Senior Sabrina Consiglio explained that she thought “AHS students can set a new year’s resolution to not leave trash around the lunch area.” She added, “It would make the school look a thousand times better with very little effort. “ In addition, Sophomore Timothy Kong proclaimed that the school needs to put forth “more effort in keeping the bathrooms clean and organized.”

    Another issue on campus that begs for a resolution is the line at the attendance office. With sicknesses like swine flu and the cold going around campus the amount of student absences has been tremendous. However returning to school is the problem. Freshman Daniela Jette can definitely relate, “The attendance line is ridiculously long. Therefore you get tardy sweeped walking back to class.” She concluded, “AHS should come up with a resolution to this long line, for instance the yellow slip that reads ‘Absence not cleared’ should also work as a pass to get to class, because of the long line.”

    Senior Cameron MacDonnell shared, “Arcadia High School should set a goal to finish at least one of the buildings, by Senior Graduation.” It only seems fair considering that it is their last year and they should at least be able to see a new building that will be added to the campus of AHS.

    These resolutions may not be official, however doing every little thing will help. The simple act of picking up trash can help AHS be a perfect school. Imagine how nice our school will be in a few years when all the construction is done with, and the campus is pristine, and the lines at the office are small. Every student could proudly say that they were involved in the building of AHS. Lets make it everyone’s goal for the new year to think of at least one resolution that will contribute to AHS.

    Joanna Liao

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    Re: AHS resolutions

    Post  Joanna Liao on Sat Dec 05, 2009 5:45 pm

    New Year’s resolutions are full of “get all straight A’s” or (insert comma and delete: or) “no more cussing,” (comma after quotations) or even “cut back on junk food.” Some resolutions are easily kept, (change to: Wink others not so much. While you may see your (delete your) teachers at their desks, brainstorming the best possible resolution, or even Mr. Vannasdall in his office pondering one (awk phrase), very few of those well thought out resolutions benefit our very own (delete: our very own) AHS. AHS is a great school, but always has room for improvements (improvement). Why not create a resolution for AHS itself? (delete sentence: why not create…ahs itself) With over 4,000 bright and young brains scattered throughout the endless AHS halls (change to: the school), there has to be at least one (one person) that can think of a great (reword great) resolution that can enable AHS to be the best it can be. All it takes is one simple thought that can lead a galaxy of change.

    Keeping the enormous, populated campus of AHS clean is a bit of a challenge (insert period and capitalize however) however, many students are ready to set resolutions to help keep the school spotless. Senior Sabrina Consiglio explained that she (delete: explained that she) thought (reword) “AHS students can set a new year’s (capitalize) resolution to not leave trash around the lunch area.” She added, “It would make the school look a thousand times better with very little effort. “ In addition, Sophomore Timothy Kong proclaimed that the school needs to put forth “more effort in keeping the bathrooms clean and organized.”

    Another issue on campus that begs for a resolution is the line at the attendance office. With sicknesses (reword) like swine flu and the cold going around campus (insert comma) the amount of student absences has been tremendous. However (comma) returning to school is the (main problem) problem. Freshman Daniela Jette can definitely relate, “The attendance line is ridiculously long. Therefore you get tardy sweeped walking back to class.” She concluded, “AHS should come up with a resolution to this long line, for instance the yellow slip that reads ‘Absence not cleared’ should also work as a pass to get to class, because of the long line.” (this contradicts your topic on how students should come up w/ resolution…when quote says AHS should come up w/ resolution)

    Senior Cameron MacDonnell shared, “Arcadia High School should set a goal to finish at least one of the buildings, by Senior Graduation.” It only seems fair considering that it is their last year and they should at least be able to see a new building that will be added to the campus of AHS. (… it would be a futile attempt)

    These resolutions may not be official, however (stop using however -.-, change to: but) doing (delete doing) every little thing (thing? Change to: action) will (change will to can) help. The simple act of picking up trash can help AHS be a perfect school. Imagine how nice our school will be in a few years when all the construction is done with, and (delete and) the campus is pristine, and the lines (singular: line) at the (attendance) office are (change to: is) small. Every student could proudly say that they were involved in the building (reword,they didn’t build the school) of AHS. Lets (Let’s) make it (delete it) everyone’s goal for the new year to think of at least one resolution that will contribute to (to the what of AHS?) AHS.

    annanaran

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    Re: AHS resolutions

    Post  annanaran on Sat Dec 05, 2009 11:09 pm

    New Year’s resolutions are full of “get all straight A’s”, “no more cussing”, or even “cut back on junk food.” Some resolutions are easily kept, others not so much. While you may see teachers at their desks, brainstorming the best possible resolution, or even Mr. Vannasdall in his office pondering a resolution, very few of those well thought out resolutions benefit AHS. AHS is a great school, but always has room for improvement. With over 4,000 bright and young brains scattered throughout the school, there has to be one person that can think of resolution that will enable AHS to be the best it can be. All it takes is one simple thought that can lead a galaxy of change.

    Keeping the enormous, populated campus of AHS clean is a bit of a challenge. However, many students are ready to set resolutions to help keep the school spotless. Senior Sabrina Consiglio announced that “AHS students can set a New Year’s resolution to not leave trash around the lunch area.” She added, “It would make the school look a thousand times better with very little effort. “ In addition, Sophomore Timothy Kong proclaimed that the school needs to put forth “more effort in keeping the bathrooms clean and organized.”

    Another issue on campus that begs for a resolution is the line at the attendance office. With contagious illnesses like swine flu and the cold going around campus, the amount of student absences has been tremendous. Unfortunately returning to school is the main problem. Freshman Daniela Jette can definitely relate, “The attendance line is ridiculously long. Therefore you get tardy sweeped walking back to class.” She concluded that a resolution should be constructed. For instance “the yellow slip that reads ‘Absence not cleared’ should also work as a pass to get to class, because of the long line.”

    Senior Cameron MacDonnell shared, “Arcadia High School should set a goal to finish at least one of the buildings, by Senior Graduation.” With it being the seniors last year, having one of the buildings done would be a nice goodbye gift.

    These resolutions may not be official, but every little action can help. The simple act of picking up trash can help AHS be a perfect school. Imagine how nice our school will be in a few years when all the construction is done with, the campus is pristine, and the line at the attendance office is small. Let’s make everyone’s goal for the New Year to think of at least one resolution that will contribute to the campus of AHS.

    katetrinh

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    Re: AHS resolutions

    Post  katetrinh on Sun Dec 06, 2009 8:23 pm

    Hey Anna,
    You were supposed to write about students' resolutions, not what they want to change about AHS.

    Joanna Liao

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    Post  Joanna Liao on Sun Dec 06, 2009 8:59 pm

    New Year’s resolutions are full of “get all straight A’s”, “no more cussing”, or even “cut back on junk food.” Some resolutions are easily kept, (change comma to semicolon) others not so much. While you may see teachers at their desks, brainstorming the best possible resolution, or even Mr. Vannasdall in his office pondering a resolution, very few of those well thought out resolutions benefit AHS. (run on sentence) AHS is a great school, but always has room for improvement. With over 4,000 bright and young brains scattered throughout the school, there has to (change “has to” to should)be one person that can think of resolution that will enable AHS to be the best it can be. All it takes is one simple thought that can lead a galaxy of change.

    Keeping the enormous, (delete comma and add: and) populated campus of AHS clean is (change is to: may be) a bit of a challenge. However, many students are ready to set resolutions to help keep the school spotless. Senior Sabrina Consiglio announced that “AHS students can set a New Year’s resolution to not leave trash around the lunch area.” She added, “It would make the school look a thousand times better with very little effort. “ In addition, Sophomore Timothy Kong proclaimed that the school needs to put forth “more effort in keeping the bathrooms clean and organized.”

    Another issue on campus that begs for a resolution is the line at the attendance office. With contagious illnesses like swine flu and the cold going around campus, the amount of student absences has been tremendous. Unfortunately returning to school is the main problem. Freshman Daniela Jette can definitely relate, “The attendance line is ridiculously long. Therefore you get tardy sweeped walking back to class.” She concluded that a resolution should be constructed. For instance “the yellow slip that reads ‘Absence not cleared’ should also work as a pass to get to class, because of the long line.”

    Senior Cameron MacDonnell shared, “Arcadia High School should set a goal to finish at least one of the buildings, by Senior Graduation.” With it being the seniors last year, having one of the buildings done would be a nice goodbye gift. (again, this is an impossible goal, also, most of your quotes are: what AHS should do, shouldn’t it be: what students should do? Because when you say AHS, it sounds like your addressing the faculty workers)

    These resolutions may not be official (what resolutions? And what makes a resolution official?), but every little action can help (be helpful). (insert, for example)The simple act of picking up trash can help AHS be a perfect school. Imagine how nice our school will be in a few years when all the construction is done with, the campus is pristine, and the line at the attendance office is small. Let’s make everyone’s goal for the New Year to think of at least one resolution that will contribute to the campus (the campus? Or the overall school?) of AHS.

    annanaran

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    Join date : 2009-09-01

    Re: AHS resolutions

    Post  annanaran on Mon Dec 07, 2009 9:42 pm

    New Year’s resolutions are full of “get all straight A’s”, “no more cussing”, or even “cut back on junk food.” Some resolutions are easily kept; others not so much. While you may see teachers at their desks, brainstorming the best possible resolution, or even Mr. Vannasdall in his office pondering a resolution, very few of those resolutions benefit AHS. AHS is a great school, but always has room for improvement. With over 4,000 bright and young brains scattered throughout the school, there should be be one person that can think of resolution that will enable AHS to be the best it can be. All it takes is one simple thought that can lead a galaxy of change.

    Keeping the enormous and populated campus of AHS clean may be a bit of a challenge. However, many students are ready to set resolutions to help keep the school spotless. Senior Sabrina Consiglio announced that “AHS students can set a New Year’s resolution to not leave trash around the lunch area.” She added, “It would make the school look a thousand times better with very little effort. “ In addition, Sophomore Timothy Kong proclaimed that the school needs to put forth “more effort in keeping the bathrooms clean and organized.”

    Another issue on campus that begs for a resolution is the line at the attendance office. With contagious illnesses like swine flu and the cold going around campus, the amount of student absences has been tremendous. Unfortunately returning to school is the main problem. Freshman Daniela Jette can definitely relate, “The attendance line is ridiculously long. Therefore you get tardy sweeped walking back to class.” She concluded that a resolution should be constructed. For instance “the yellow slip that reads ‘Absence not cleared’ should also work as a pass to get to class, because of the long line.” She also mentioned that, “We [students] should try to arrive earlier on the days we need to get our absence excused to eliminate the long-line issue.”


    These resolutions may be difficult to reach but every little action can be helpful. For example, the simple act of picking up trash can help AHS be a perfect school. Imagine how nice our school will be in a few years when all the construction is done with, the campus is pristine, and the line at the attendance office is small. Let’s make everyone’s goal for the New Year to think of at least one resolution that will contribute AHS.

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