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    Joanna Shen

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    Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  Joanna Shen on Wed Oct 07, 2009 12:54 am

    Caffeine for the Weary
    Where to Get your Daily Dose of Caffeine
    Coffees, Chai Teas, and Caffeine

    Now that you're well into the school year, the novelty of light homework during September and a gradual ease into the intense workload has worn of off. As the pile of work steadily increases on your desk, so does the need for the glorified drink of the heavens, coffee, tea, and more coffee. Coffee serves as the late night friend that accompanies you while we slave over our desks and the warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the coming cold. Aside from the overpriced and overbought cappuccinos from Starbucks and Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf, multiple homely stores around Arcadia serve coffee and tea of superior quality without commercial ranking. So, before you shimmy on down to the nearest Starbucks, try a cup of coffee or tea from one of these local neighbors that offer all the same pleasing rejuvenations.

    1. Ten Ren Tea Time
    Located at 846 W Duarte Rd., Ten Ren provides quick service and a pleasing atmosphere. The establishment lives up to its name, offers a variety of teas that are made from actual tea leaves rather than unknown powder packages that we would rather leave anonymous. Although the price is not quite as appealing to the eye, the sheer quality of their coffees and teas lure any customer back for more. Ten Ren is most famous for its boba milk tea. But, for those who do not have that large of a sweet tooth, “get the less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba,” advised senior Winston Chang, “Their tea is of the utmost quality.”

    2. Roaster Family Coffee
    This individually owned coffee establishment offers a wide selection of coffees and treats for customers to enjoy. Brewed the old-fashioned method, using a vacuum brewer instead of the to-go brewers at Starbucks, the coffee at Roaster Family Coffee is of a unique taste and quality. Nestled within the plaza next to IHOP, this quaint cafe is located at 713 W Duarte Rd # F. The Victorian-style furniture and comfortable ambiance is the perfect environment for a warm cup of coffee. Coffee beans are also sold for customer convenience. [Insert quote here]

    3. Java Go Go Cafe/Wraps360
    Java Go Go Cafe, also known as Wraps360 for their wide assortment of wraps and sandwiches available, caters to the snack scene and for those who prefer light meals. They offer both coffee and teas to complement sandwiches. Located on 127 W Foothill Blvd., Java Go Go Cafe has a drive-thru, suitable for the morning rush for coffee. [Insert quote here] Whereas it is often difficult to get past the lines in large, chain, coffee shops, the cafe's convenience makes life just a little easier with the speedy service.

    Whether it be 2:00 a.m. and your word document is still blank or 6:00 a.m and you have just woken up in a frenzy after realizing you overslept, caffeine will soon become your best friend. So brace yourself for the upcoming year; it's not going to be a breeze but your coffee and teas will make the road to success just a tad bit easier.

    hanarudolph

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    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  hanarudolph on Thu Oct 08, 2009 11:48 am

    Now that you're well into the school year, the novelty of light homework during September and a gradual ease into the intense workload of school has worn of delete "of" off. As the pile of work steadily increases on your desk, so does the need for the glorified drink of the heavens, [change comma to colon] coffee, tea, and more coffee. Coffee serves as the late night friend that accompanies you while we slave over our desks and the warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the coming cold.[change to "Coffee is that late night friend to accompany you as you slave of your desk; that warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the lack of sleep and coming cold."] [insert transition] Aside from the overpriced and overbought cappuccinos from Starbucks and Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf, multiple homely stores around Arcadia serve coffee and tea of superior quality without the commercial ranking. So, before you shimmy on down to the nearest Starbucks, try a cup of coffee or tea from one of these local neighbors that offer all the same pleasing rejuvenations.

    1. Ten Ren Tea Time
    Located at 846 W Duarte Rd., Ten Ren provides quick service and a pleasing atmosphere. The establishment lives up to its name [only ten flavors?], offers [change to "offering" a variety of teas that are [delete "that are" made from actual tea leaves, rather than some unidentified unknown [delete "unknown"] powder packages [change "packages" to "package"] that we would rather leave anonymous [delete this last clause]. Although the price is not quite as appealing to the eye [I though the point of this article was to talk about teas that are cheaper...?], the sheer quality of their coffees and teas can lure any customer back for more. Ten Ren is most famous for its boba milk tea. But, [delete comma] for those who do not have that large of a [delte "large of a" sweet tooth, “get the less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba,” advised senior Winston Chang, “Their tea is of the utmost quality.” [The first quote is really awkward. Rephrase it in your own words and keep the second one.]

    2. Roaster Family Coffee
    This individually owned coffee establishment offers a wide selection of coffees and treats for customers to enjoy. Brewed the old-fashioned method, using a vacuum brewer instead of the to-go brewers at Starbucks, the coffee at Roaster Family Coffee is of a [change "is of a" to "has a"] unique taste and quality. Nestled within the plaza next to IHOP, this quaint cafe is located at 713 W Duarte Rd # F [delete space between # and F]. The Victorian-style furniture and comfortable ambiance is the perfect environment for a warm cup of coffee. Coffee beans are also sold for customer convenience [change to "for the customer's home enjoyment". [Insert quote here]

    3. Java Go Go Cafe/Wraps360
    Java Go Go Cafe, also known as Wraps360 for their wide assortment of wraps and sandwiches available, caters to the snack scene and for those who prefer light meals [You can't compare the snack scene to people who like light meals]. They offer both [delete "both"] coffees and teas to complement sandwiches. Located on 127 W Foothill Blvd., Java Go Go Cafe has a drive-thru, suitable for the morning rush for coffee. [Insert quote here] Whereas it is often difficult to get past the lines in large, chain, coffee shops, the cafe's convenience makes life just a little easier with the speedy service. [change sentence to "As opposed to the large, rushed lines of chain coffee shops, this cafe makes life just a little more convenient with the speedy service."

    Whether it be 2:00 a.m. and your word document is still blank or 6:00 a.m and you have just woken up in a frenzy after realizing you overslept [this clause is really awkward and is lacking parallel structure], caffeine will soon become your best friend. So brace yourself for the upcoming year; [change to colon] it's not going to be a breeze, but your coffee and teas will make the road to success just a tad bit easier.

    Joanna Shen

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    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  Joanna Shen on Sat Oct 10, 2009 5:21 pm

    Now that you're well into the school year, the novelty of light homework during September and a gradual ease into the intense workload of school has worn off. As the pile of work steadily increases on your desk, so does the need for the glorified drink of the heavens: coffee, tea, and more coffee. Caffeine serves as the late night friend that accompanies you while you slave over your desk and is the warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the coming cold. Aside from the overpriced and overbought cappuccinos from Starbucks and Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf, multiple stores around Arcadia serve coffee and tea of superior quality without the commercial ranking. So, before you shimmy on down to the nearest Starbucks, try a cup of coffee or tea from one of these local neighbors that offer all the same pleasing rejuvenations.

    1. Ten Ren Tea Time
    Located at 846 W Duarte Rd., Ten Ren provides quick service and a pleasing atmosphere. The establishment lives up to its name, offering a variety of teas made from actual tea leaves, rather than unidentified powder packages that we would rather leave anonymous. Although the prices are not quite as appealing to the eye, the sheer quality of their coffees and teas can lure any customer back for more. Though rare items can be found on their menu,Ten Ren is most famous for its boba milk tea. But for those who do not have that sweet tooth, “get the less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba,” said senior Winston Chang, “Their tea is of the utmost quality.”

    2. Roaster Family Coffee
    This individually owned coffee establishment offers a wide selection of refreshments and treats for customers to enjoy. Brewed through the old-fashioned method, using a vacuum brewer instead of the to-go brewers at Starbucks, the coffee at Roaster Family Coffee has a unique taste and quality. Nestled within the plaza next to IHOP, this quaint cafe is located at 713 W Duarte Rd #F. The Victorian-style furniture and comfortable ambiance make the perfect environment for a warm cup of coffee. Coffee beans are also sold for customer convenience. [Insert quote here]

    3. Java Go Go Cafe/Wraps360
    Java Go Go Cafe, also known as Wraps360 for its wide assortment of wraps and sandwiches available, caters to the snack scene and to those who prefer light meals. It offers coffees and teas to complement sandwiches. Located on 127 W Foothill Blvd., Java Go Go Cafe has a drive-thru, suitable for the morning rush for coffee. [Insert quote here] Whereas it is often difficult to get past the lines in large, chain, coffee shops, this cafe's convenience makes life just a little easier with its speedy service.

    Whether it is 2:00 a.m. and your word document is still blank or 6:00 a.m and you just woke up in a frenzy after realizing you overslept, caffeine will soon become your best friend. So brace yourself for the upcoming year; it's not going to be a breeze, but your coffee and teas will make the road to success just a tad bit easier.


    Hi Hana! Thanks for your edits! I just wanted to let you know that I read all your comments, but I left some the way they are because I think they sound fine left alone. Variety of teas is plural so it should be “packages.” The point of the article was to offer alternatives to the usual Starbucks, not price. We're not allowed to rephrase quotes. =/ Oh, and for the snack scene and people comparison, I'm not really comparing. I'm saying the shop caters to the snack scene and those who prefer light meals. The shop caters to the snack scene. The shop also caters to customers who prefer light meats. Last sentence edit of Java Go Go Cafe is a misplaced modifier. The switch from semi-colon to colon wouldn't be suitable because the second clause is not a subsection of the first. It's more synonymous.

    hanarudolph

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    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  hanarudolph on Sun Oct 11, 2009 10:34 am

    For #1, I suggested deleting "we would rather leave anonymous," by adding "unidentified." I still think that clause is unnecessary and awkward. Also, when you say they're not as appealing to the eye, what are you comparing the prices to? You need to explicitly restate Starbucks, if that's the point of the article. And by the way-- if that's the point, you may want to delete the Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf from the introduction. As for the quote, can you say something like: Ten Ren even caters to those without that sweet tooth-- customers can ask for a "less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba," according to senior Winston Chang.

    For #3, then can you change "Whereas" to "While"? You're right about the misplaced modifier-- sorry and thanks. Smile As for the snack scene part, I know that you're not comparing them; what I mean is that by saying "to the snack scene" and "to those people," parallel structure is lacking. Can you change it to "caters to those who want a quick snack or to those who prefer light meals"?

    Thanks for the explanation at the end by the way. Smile

    Joanna Shen

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    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  Joanna Shen on Mon Oct 12, 2009 7:32 pm

    Now that you're well into the school year, the novelty of light homework during September and a gradual ease into the intense workload of school has worn off. As the pile of work steadily increases on your desk, so does the need for the glorified drink of the heavens: coffee, tea, and more coffee. Caffeine serves as the late night friend that accompanies you while you slave over your desk and is the warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the coming cold. Aside from the overpriced and overbought cappuccinos from Starbucks and Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf, multiple stores around Arcadia serve coffee and tea of superior quality without the commercial ranking. So, before you shimmy on down to the nearest Starbucks, try a cup of coffee or tea from one of these local neighbors that offer all the same pleasing rejuvenations.

    1. Ten Ren Tea Time
    Located at 846 W Duarte Rd., Ten Ren provides quick service and a pleasing atmosphere. The establishment lives up to its name, offering a variety of teas made from actual tea leaves, rather than unidentified powder packages. Although the prices are a bit pricier in comparison to other cafes, the sheer quality of their coffees and teas can lure any customer back for more. Though rare items can be found on their menu,Ten Ren is most famous for its boba milk tea. But those who do not have that sweet tooth can “get the less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba,” said senior Winston Chang, “Their tea is of the utmost quality.”

    2. Roaster Family Coffee
    This individually owned coffee establishment offers a wide selection of refreshments and treats for customers to enjoy. Brewed through the old-fashioned method, using a vacuum brewer instead of the to-go brewers at Starbucks, the coffee at Roaster Family Coffee has a unique taste and quality. Nestled within the plaza next to IHOP, this quaint cafe is located at 713 W Duarte Rd #F. The Victorian-style furniture and comfortable ambiance make the perfect environment for a warm cup of coffee. Coffee beans are also sold for customer convenience. [Insert quote here]

    3. Java Go Go Cafe/Wraps360
    Java Go Go Cafe, also known as Wraps360 for its wide assortment of wraps and sandwiches available, caters to those who want a light snack or quick meal. It offers coffees and teas to complement sandwiches. Located on 127 W Foothill Blvd., Java Go Go Cafe has a drive-thru, suitable for the morning rush for coffee. [Insert quote here] While it is often difficult to get past the lines in large, chain, coffee shops, this cafe's convenience makes life just a little easier with its speedy service.

    Whether it is 2:00 a.m. and your word document is still blank or 6:00 a.m and you just woke up in a frenzy after realizing you overslept, caffeine will soon become your best friend. So brace yourself for the upcoming year; it's not going to be a breeze, but your coffee and teas will make the road to success just a tad bit easier.


    Ok, I fixed the awkward wordings. =D Thanks for the clarification!

    hanarudolph

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    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  hanarudolph on Mon Oct 12, 2009 8:55 pm

    alright, looks good! i'll try to copy-edit again when you add those quotes

    hanarudolph

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    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  hanarudolph on Tue Oct 13, 2009 11:36 am

    Now that you're well into the school year, the novelty of light homework during September and a [change to "the"] gradual ease into the intense workload of school has worn off. As the pile of work steadily increases on your desk, so does the need for the glorified drink of the heavens: coffee, tea, and more coffee [your article doesn't really focus on coffee over tea; they seem to have equal emphasis?]. Caffeine serves as the late night friend that accompanies you while you slave over your desk and is [replace "and is" with comma] the warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the coming cold. Aside from [this isn't the best phrasing-- perhaps delete the part about starbucks? or split this sentence in two because I can't think of an alternate...]the overpriced and overbought cappuccinos and tea? from Starbucks and Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf, multiple stores around Arcadia serve coffee and tea of superior quality without the commercial ranking. So, [delete comma] before you shimmy on down to the nearest Starbucks, try a cup of coffee or tea from one of these local neighbors that offer all the same pleasing rejuvenations.

    1. Ten Ren Tea Time
    Located at 846 W Duarte Rd., Ten Ren provides quick service and a pleasing atmosphere. The establishment lives up to its name, offering a variety of teas made from actual tea leaves, rather than unidentified powder packages. Although the prices are a bit pricier [repetitive word choice] in comparison to other cafes, the sheer quality of their coffees and teas can lure any customer back for more. Though rare items can be found on their menu,Ten Ren is most famous for its boba milk tea. But those who do not have that sweet tooth can “get the less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba,” said senior Winston Chang, “Their tea is of the utmost quality.”

    2. Roaster Family Coffee
    This individually owned coffee establishment offers a wide selection of refreshments and treats for customers to enjoy. Brewed through the old-fashioned method, using a vacuum brewer instead of the to-go brewers at Starbucks, the coffee at Roaster Family Coffee has a unique taste and quality. Nestled within the plaza next to IHOP, this quaint cafe is located at 713 W Duarte Rd #F. The Victorian-style furniture and comfortable ambiance make the perfect environment for a warm cup of coffee. Coffee beans are also sold for customer convenience. [Insert quote here]

    3. Java Go Go Cafe/Wraps360
    Java Go Go Cafe, also known as Wraps360 for its wide assortment of wraps and sandwiches available [delete "available"], caters to those who want a light snack or quick meal. It offers coffees and teas to complement sandwiches. Located on 127 W Foothill Blvd., Java Go Go Cafe has a drive-thru, suitable for the morning rush for coffee. [Insert quote here] While it is often difficult to get past the lines in large, chain, [delete comma] coffee shops, this cafe's convenience makes life just a little easier with its speedy service.

    Whether it is 2:00 a.m. and your word document is still blank or 6:00 a.m and you just woke up in a frenzy after realizing you overslept, caffeine will soon become [replace "will soon become" with "is"] your best friend. So brace yourself for the upcoming year; it's not going to be a breeze, but your coffee and teas will make the road to success just a tad bit easier.

    Joanna Shen

    Posts : 87
    Join date : 2009-08-31

    Re: Caffeine for the Weary

    Post  Joanna Shen on Wed Oct 14, 2009 2:23 am

    Now that you're well into the school year, the novelty of light homework during September and the gradual ease into the intense workload of school has worn off. As the pile of work steadily increases on your desk, so does the need for the glorified drinks of the heavens: coffee and tea. Caffeine serves as the late night friend that accompanies you while you slave over your desk, the warm refreshment that brightens your eyes despite the coming cold. While many opt for the overpriced and overbought cappuccinos and teas from Starbucks and Coffee Bean & Tea Leaf, multiple stores around Arcadia serve coffee and tea of comparable quality without the commercial ranking. So before you shimmy on down to the nearest Starbucks, try a cup of coffee or tea from one of these local neighbors that offer all the same pleasing rejuvenations.

    1. Ten Ren Tea Time
    Located at 846 W Duarte Rd., Ten Ren provides quick service and a pleasing atmosphere. The establishment lives up to its name, offering a variety of teas made from actual tea leaves, rather than unidentified powder packages. Although the prices are a bit high in comparison to other cafes, the sheer quality of their coffees and teas can lure any customer back for more. Though rare items can be found on their menu,Ten Ren is most famous for its boba milk tea. But those who do not have that sweet tooth can “get the less sweetened option of the milk tea to balance out the sweetness of the boba,” said senior Winston Chang, “Their tea is of the utmost quality.”

    2. Roaster Family Coffee
    This individually owned coffee establishment offers a wide selection of refreshments and treats for customers to enjoy. Brewed through the old-fashioned method, using a vacuum brewer instead of the to-go brewers at Starbucks, the coffee at Roaster Family Coffee has a unique taste and quality. Nestled within the plaza next to IHOP, this quaint cafe is located at 713 W Duarte Rd #F. The Victorian-style furniture and comfortable ambiance make the perfect environment for a warm cup of coffee. Coffee beans are also sold for customer convenience.

    3. Java Go Go Cafe/Wraps360
    Java Go Go Cafe, also known as Wraps360 for its wide assortment of wraps and sandwiches, caters to those who want a light snack or quick meal. It offers coffees and teas to complement sandwiches. Located on 127 W Foothill Blvd., Java Go Go Cafe has a drive-thru, suitable for the morning rush for coffee. "It's a great place to go if you're short on time and looking for a quick bite to eat," said sophomore Amy Wang. While it is often difficult to get past the lines in large, chain coffee shops, this cafe's convenience makes life just a little easier with its speedy service.

    Whether it is 2:00 a.m. and your word document is still blank or 6:00 a.m and you just woke up in a frenzy after realizing you overslept, caffeine is your best friend. So brace yourself for the upcoming year; it's not going to be a breeze, but your coffee and teas will make the road to success just a tad bit easier.

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