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Raphael Lu (SORRY MY EMAIL IS BEING WEIRD SO I NEED TO PUT IT ON THE FORUM SO I HAVE IT LATER)

Circus PETA Trouble

Many if us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group, animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. He request was ignored and was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse.
PETA is know trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) to deny a license renewal on

Raphael Lu (working on quotes)

Circus PETA Trouble

Many if us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group, animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. He request was ignored and was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse.
PETA is know trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) to deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Many past attempts have been made, but the circus was able to avoid them.

Many if [of] us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group, animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. He [His] request was ignored and [he] was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse.
PETA is know [now] trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) to [extra "to"] deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Many past attempts have been made, but the circus was able to avoid them.

Raphael Lu (working on quotes)

Circus PETA Trouble

Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group, animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse.
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) to deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Many past attempts have been made, but the circus was able to avoid them.

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Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group, [replace comma with colon] animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse.
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) to [delete "to"] deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Many past attempts have been made, but the circus was able to avoid them.

Raphael Lu

Circus PETA Trouble

Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia belives “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He states that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”
Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun states “even though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”

PETA Attacks Circus
PETA Elephant

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Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia belives [believes] “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He states [stated] that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”
Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun states [stated,] “even [Even] though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”

Raphael Lu

Circus PETA Trouble

Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia believes “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He stated that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”
Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun stated “Even though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”

PETA Attacks Circus
PETA Elephant

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Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.
Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.
In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.
What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia believes “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He stated that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”
Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun stated “Even though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”

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Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.

Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.

In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them.

What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia believes “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He stated that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”

Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun stated “Even though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”

- Nice intro and conclusion; get into that habit (:
- What is your angle? What are you trying to prove with this article? I kind of see where you are going with it but try to clarify it a bit.
- Otherwise, good!

Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.

Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.

In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them. These horrific incidents really show to the general public, that the circus members are blind to the pain the animals are going through.

What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia believes “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He stated that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”

Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun stated “Even though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”

Many of us know the Ringling Brothers as The Greatest Show on Earth, but lately the People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA) has uncovered a darker side to the famous circus group: animal abuse.

Over a period of time PETA was able to collect over 700 documents, including photos and videos that the group had, in fact, been torturing and neglecting the animals used for the show. In 2004 a lion was killed when circus owners failed to install a cooling system on their trains when traveling across the Mojave Desert. Knowing about this, the circus veteran Frank Hagan, told the train to stop. His request was ignored and he was later fired. The company then threatened veteran Hagan with lawsuits if he didn’t keep his mouth shut.

In various cases the owners of the elephants were known to hit the elephants with hooks and electrical poles to “train” them. These horrific incidents really show to [delete "to"] the general public, [delete comma] that the circus members are blind to the pain the animals are going through.

What many spectators fail to realize is that the tricks they see the animals perform are a product of years of abuse. Freshman Nicole Gandia believes “they honestly really don’t care about them. They only see them as animals that perform for them.”
PETA is now trying to have the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) deny a license renewal on the group on Apr. 28. Senior Andy Liang believes this will happen again. He stated that “PETA has a pretty bad track record for saying ridiculous [things] and the USDA isn’t big on animal abuse.”

Now as we near Apr. 28, a light shines on the poor animals, giving them a ray of hope. Freshman Andrew Sun stated “Even though we may enjoy the circus, we must also at the same time question the means and how far circus trainers go to stage that kind of extraordinary entertainment.”