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    christopherchen

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    Rough Draft College Column

    Post  christopherchen on Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:00 am

    Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering (Rough)
    Christopher Chen
    Academics Section

    Though at a glance, many always see Yale or many other generically prestigious colleges as “better” than most, if not all, available colleges and overlook the efficiency of choosing colleges by the major. Since many are ambivalent or stiffly undecided about their major, most don’t appreciate a college’s narrow focus on any one subject. Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is a perfect example of a college that dedicates itself to a single study and proves itself even above other colleges at that subject though many would not expect it.
    The Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is around 55,000 dollars a year to attend, not counting potential cost relieve through scholarship programs or financial aid. This isn’t bad considering you would have to pay nearly 60,000 dollars to attend Harvard’s school of engineering that only offers one type of engineering major- Engineering Science. However, as its name implies, Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering offers more diversity of choice and depth of study in engineering. With its relatively lost cost and high education, it breaks many stereotypes surrounding many schools including Harvard being better than any school you haven’t heard of. The most plausible yet most astonishing fact about Franklin W Olin College of Engineering is that there are only three majors, electrical/communications, general, and mechanical engineering, and are the only ones that you can apply for. You can then study the subject for the four years for a Bachelor’s degree. This obvious specialty and focus on engineering makes it only too apparent that its engineering program is more prestigious, in a sense, than other generally high-held schools, even Harvard, probably the most commonly school to be the “best-case-scenario” school to college appliers.
    As you can see, choosing a college can be relatively simplified by being more selective in a major though many are relatively undecided in that sense. The Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is an exemplary model of how focusing on your strengths and searching college by specialty can get you a relatively good deal on tuition and education.

    Statistics;
    SAT Critical Reading: 700-790
    SAT Math: 740-800
    SAT Writing: 670-770
    ACT Composite: 32-35

    For more information, visit http://olin.edu

    jennylin

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    Re: Rough Draft College Column

    Post  jennylin on Wed Sep 09, 2009 7:13 pm

    good. i like how you compare it to the Ivys, making the Ivys seem overrated. LOL. but add more information other than academics in it. like the student-teacher ratio in each class, the environment the school is in, the clubs it has to offer, any NCAA teams etc etc.

    also,

    Statistics:
    SAT Critical Reading
    SAT Math
    SAT Writing
    ACT Composite
    Tuition:

    ^ even though you already mentioned the tuition in your article, still put it under stats.

    hanarudolph

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    Re: Rough Draft College Column

    Post  hanarudolph on Fri Sep 11, 2009 10:28 pm

    Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering (Rough)
    Christopher Chen
    Academics Section

    Though at a glance, many always see Yale or many many is repetitive; reword other generically prestigious colleges as “better” than most, if not all, available colleges and overlook the efficiency of choosing colleges by the major Fragment! rephrase. Either add a clause to make the "though" phrase make sense, or delete the "though" phrase at the beginning. . Since many are ambivalent or stiffly undecided about their major, most don't constantly refer to people as most or many. don’t appreciate a college’s narrow focus on any one subject. Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is a perfect example of a college that dedicates itself to a single study and proves itself even above other colleges at that subject though many would not expect it.Awk--reword!
    The Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is around change is around to costs about 55,000 dollars a year to attend, not counting potential cost relieve change cost relieve to relief through scholarship programs or financial aid. This isn’t bad insert comma considering that you would have to pay nearly 60,000 dollars to attend Harvard’s school of engineering insert comma; School of Engineering is capitalized that reword: which only offers one type of engineering major- Engineering Science. However, Delete however as its name implies, Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering offers more reword: much diversity of choice and depth of study in insert "it's specialty," engineering. With its relatively lost cost low cost yet high quality education and high education, it reword: Olin College breaks many stereotypes surrounding many schools including Harvard being better than any school you haven’t heard of reword! that second part of the sentence makes no sense, not to mention that you shouldn't use "you" all of a sudden when you've been using "much/many" throughout the whole article.. The most plausible yet most delete second most astonishing fact about Franklin W Olin College of Engineering is that there are only three majors, change comma to colon electrical/communications insert engineering, general insert engineering, and mechanical engineering, change comma to dash and insert these are the only ones that you see note about "you" usage can apply for. You change to accepted students can delete can then study the change to their subject insert of interest for the delete the four years for a Bachelor’s degree. This obvious specialty and focus on engineering reword! cause wait a sec-- you're contradicting yourself. you're saying the diversity [within the engineering department] of olin makes it better than harvard, but olin only offers three majors, not much more than the one at harvard. and now you're saying that the three majors mean that it's very specialized and prestigious, so doesn't that mean Harvard's single engineering major must also be prestigious? makes it only too apparent reword! it's not "only too apparent"-- be careful not to use cliche phrasing without proper backing for your words that its engineering program is more prestigious, in a sense, than other generally high-held schools, even Harvard, probably the most commonly school to be the “best-case-scenario” school to college appliers reword! and btw, the word is applicants. .
    As you can see, again, see note about you; and i as a reader can't "see"-- you need to be much more clear and persuasive about the values of this college choosing a college can be relatively simplified by being more selective in a major though many are run on! relatively undecided in that sense awk! reword!. The Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is an exemplary model of how focusing on your strengths and searching college by specialty can get you a relatively good deal on tuition and education reword! your conclusion is scattered-- you need to get back to the point, and this isn't working..

    Statistics;
    SAT Critical Reading: 700-790
    SAT Math: 740-800
    SAT Writing: 670-770
    ACT Composite: 32-35

    For more information, visit http://olin.edu

    christopherchen

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    Re: Rough Draft College Column

    Post  christopherchen on Wed Sep 16, 2009 12:13 am

    Feel free to do any editing so I can send it to my editors soon enough so it won't wreak their page design.

    Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering FINAL (more or less)
    Christopher Chen
    Academics Section

    Though at a glance, a lot of college appliers always see Yale or many other generically prestigious colleges as “better” than most, if not all, available colleges and overlook the efficiency of choosing colleges by the major. Since many are ambivalent or stiffly undecided about their major and don’t appreciate a college’s narrow focus on any one subject. Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is a perfect example of a college that dedicates itself to a single study and proves itself even above other colleges at that subject though many would not expect it.
    Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering was founded in 1997 by a contribution of over $400 million from the Franklin W. Olin Foundation (hence the college’s name,) keep in mind this funding is one of the largest in the country in proportion to the student body. After officially opening in the fall of 2002 Franklin W. Olin School of Engineering was able to give a full scholarship to each and every student accept. This is something unheard of to many students and parents. Don’t get your hopes up just yet though, because due to economic crisis and cost cutting, the school had lost about 25% of their funding and was forced to reduce its scholarship program in half which adds up to about $36,400 a year (it’s tuition about $55,000 a year without the scholarship program.) However, once re-achieving their previous endowment, Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering will begin its full-scholarship program once again. Now consider that it would be nearly $60,000 to attend Harvard, and studying engineering at Harvard would not nearly be as advanced or in-depth as a school revolving around engineering. Despite financial trouble, Franklin W. Olin School of Engineering’s quality of education still remains well above many standards by preserving its goals in higher education in its three majors of engineering: electrical/communications, general, and mechanical engineering. With a student-to-faculty rate of 9 to 1 and only 334 students, it’s not hard to see how superior this college is than even the Ivy League’s. As you can see, this college is a gateway to many opportunities in the engineering field.
    As you can see, choosing a college can be immensely simplified by being more selective in a major although many are relatively undecided in their subject of expertise. The Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is an exemplary model of how focusing on your strengths in searching for college can get you a great deal on education and tuition. Obviously, this school has a lot of potential to become well known in the entire field of engineering.

    Statistics;
    SAT Critical Reading: 700-790
    SAT Math: 740-800
    SAT Writing: 670-770
    ACT Composite: 32-35
    In-state Tuition: $54,523
    Out-of-state Tuition: $54,523
    Percentage of Acceptance: 14%

    For more information, visit http://olin.edu

    Joe Tian

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    Re: Rough Draft College Column

    Post  Joe Tian on Wed Sep 16, 2009 11:27 am

    hey chris, try to follow the corrections the copy editors make.

    christopherchen

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    Re: Rough Draft College Column

    Post  christopherchen on Wed Sep 16, 2009 10:34 pm

    Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering RE
    Christopher Chen
    Academics Section

    At a glance, a lot of college applicants always see Yale or many other generically prestigious colleges as “better” than most, if not all, available colleges and overlook the efficiency of choosing colleges by the major. Since many are ambivalent or stiffly undecided about their major and don’t appreciate a college’s narrow focus on any one subject. Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is a perfect example of a college that dedicates itself to a single study and proves itself stronger in this subject, stronger than colleges that some would not suspect.
    Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering was founded in 1997 by a contribution of over $400 million from the Franklin W. Olin Foundation (hence the college’s name,) keep in mind this funding is one of the largest in the country in proportion to the student body. After officially opening in the fall of 2002 Franklin W. Olin School of Engineering was able to give a full scholarship to each and every student accept. This is something unheard of to most students and parents. Don’t get your hopes up just yet though, because due to economic crisis and cost cutting, the school had lost about 25% of their funding and was forced to reduce its scholarship program in half which adds up to about $36,400 a year (it’s tuition about $55,000 a year without the scholarship program.) However, once re-achieving their previous endowment, Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is planning on beginning its full-scholarship program once again. Now consider that it would be nearly $60,000 to attend Harvard and that studying engineering at Harvard would not nearly be as advanced or in-depth as a school revolving around engineering. Despite financial trouble, Franklin W. Olin School of Engineering’s quality of education still remains well above numerous standards by preserving its goals in higher education in its three majors of engineering: electrical/communications, general, and mechanical engineering. With a student-to-faculty rate of 9 to 1 and only 334 students, it’s not hard to see how superior this college is than even the Ivy League’s. Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering holds many opportunities in the engineering field with its high scores. This college is obviously a gateway to many opportunities in the engineering field.
    As elaborated, choosing a college can be immensely simplified by being more selective in a your major, although many are relatively undecided in their subject of expertise. The Franklin W. Olin College of Engineering is an exemplary model of how focusing on your strengths in searching for college can get you a great deal on education and tuition. Obviously, this school has a lot of potential to become well known in the field of engineering and a worthy choice for those who wish to study engineering.

    Statistics;
    SAT Critical Reading: 700-790
    SAT Math: 740-800
    SAT Writing: 670-770
    ACT Composite: 32-35
    In-state Tuition: $54,523
    Out-of-state Tuition: $54,523
    Percentage of Acceptance: 14%

    For more information, visit http://olin.edu

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